Science— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is honest and provides reasons, but it is incomplete and ends abruptly. To improve, complete your thoughts and avoid leaving sentences unfinished. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide a specific example of a science topic you enjoy.

例: Well, admittedly I'm not particularly fond of studying science because I find it quite challenging, especially since I'm not very confident with maths. However, I do enjoy certain topics like biology, particularly human anatomy, because I find it fascinating to learn how our bodies work.

提案: Your answer is relevant and includes a specific example, which is good. However, there is a small grammatical error ('I it was') and the answer could be more concise. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

例: No, I don't use my science knowledge every day, but I remember once last year when I applied my understanding of friction to help my cousin. He was struggling to open a bottle with a very tight lid, so I suggested using a towel to increase friction, which made it much easier to twist off. It was a practical way to use science in daily life.

提案: Your answer shows interest and provides reasons, but it is incomplete and ends abruptly. To improve, finish your sentences and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, try to include a prediction or opinion to enrich your response.

例: Yes, definitely. Recently, my mom and I have become fascinated by growing beautiful plants at home, but unfortunately, many of them didn't thrive as we expected. Because of this, we want to learn more about botany and plant biology to understand how to create the best conditions for indoor plants to grow healthily. I think gaining this knowledge will help us succeed in gardening.

提案: Your answer is relevant and includes examples, but it ends abruptly and lacks a concluding sentence. To improve, complete your thoughts and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, try to use a wider range of vocabulary.

例: Yes, I believe it is essential for everyone to study science because it helps us understand the world better and improve our daily lives. For instance, learning about how to grow indoor plants can enhance our living environment and increase green spaces in our neighbourhoods, which benefits both our health and the environment. Overall, science provides practical knowledge that is useful in everyday life.

提案: Your answer is natural, coherent, and includes specific examples, which is excellent. To improve further, you could add a linking phrase to connect your ideas more smoothly and use a slightly wider range of vocabulary.

例: Yes, I really enjoy watching scientific documentaries, especially those about wild animals and marine life. I find them fascinating because they show how diverse and lively nature is, and they often teach me new things about the environment. For example, I recently watched a captivating documentary about coral reefs, which was both educational and inspiring.

× However, I do enjoy certain topics like.

✓ However, I do enjoy certain topics.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'like' without specifying what follows, making it incomplete and structurally incorrect. To correct this, remove 'like' or complete the sentence by specifying the topics.

× I it was a practical way to use science in daily life.

✓ It was a practical way to use science in daily life.

The sentence contains an extraneous pronoun 'I' at the beginning, which disrupts sentence structure. Removing 'I' corrects the sentence and makes it grammatically correct.

× I think gaining.

✓ I think gaining knowledge in this area would be beneficial.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly with 'gaining'. To correct it, complete the thought by specifying what is being gained or the intended meaning.

× Overall, science provides practice.

✓ Overall, science provides practical knowledge.

The sentence ends abruptly and is incomplete. 'Provides practice' is vague and unclear. Replacing it with 'provides practical knowledge' clarifies the meaning and completes the sentence.