Science— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and use correct articles ('an experiment'). Also, replace 'funny' with a more appropriate adjective like 'enjoyable' or 'fun'. Try to provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words.

例: Yes, I enjoy studying science at school because the lessons are both interesting and practical. For example, in class, the teacher often shows us how to conduct experiments, which makes learning fun and engaging.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains redundancy. Try to be more specific and avoid repeating phrases. Also, avoid filler words like 'umm' and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I use science knowledge every day, even if I don't always realize it. For instance, gravity affects everything around us, like when I drop objects or walk downstairs.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases. For example, 'astrology' should be 'astronomy' when referring to stars and space. Also, avoid filler words like 'uh' and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to explain your interest clearly.

例: Recently, I have become interested in astronomy because I find the stars and space fascinating. I want to learn more about how the universe operates and the mysteries of interstellar space.

提案: Your answer conveys the main idea but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use clearer sentences and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain your reasoning logically.

例: Yes, I believe everyone should learn basic science because it helps prevent accidents. For example, understanding simple scientific principles can keep people safe in daily life.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains grammatical errors. Avoid incomplete sentences and use correct verb forms. Also, clarify your ideas and use linking words to connect them smoothly.

例: Yes, I enjoyed watching science TV programs, especially as a child. They were interesting and helped broaden my horizons by teaching me new things about the world.

× Uh, on the class the teacher will teach us how to conduct a experiment and it is very funny activity.

✓ Uh, in the class the teacher will teach us how to conduct an experiment and it is a very fun activity.

The phrase 'on the class' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in the class' (Grammar Problem Type ID: 11). 'A experiment' is incorrect because 'experiment' starts with a vowel sound, so it should be 'an experiment' (Grammar Problem Type ID: 22). Also, 'funny activity' is not appropriate here; 'fun' is the correct adjective to describe an enjoyable activity (Grammar Problem Type ID: 13).

× I think the science knowledge everywhere in my life, but sometimes we are not noticed, so sometimes we don't notice.

✓ I think science knowledge is everywhere in my life, but sometimes we do not notice it.

The phrase 'the science knowledge everywhere in my life' lacks a verb and the article 'the' is unnecessary before 'science knowledge' (Grammar Problem Type ID: 23 and 22). 'We are not noticed' is incorrect; the intended meaning is 'we do not notice' (Grammar Problem Type ID: 11). The sentence is corrected to include the verb 'is' and proper phrasing for clarity.

× Uh, recently I'm interested in the astrology because I think the interstellar is very beautiful and amazing, so I want to learn more about it and know how it. Operate.

✓ Uh, recently I'm interested in astrology because I think interstellar space is very beautiful and amazing, so I want to learn more about it and know how it operates.

'The astrology' is incorrect; 'astrology' is an uncountable noun and does not need 'the' (Grammar Problem Type ID: 22). 'The interstellar' is incomplete; it should be 'interstellar space' or 'the interstellar medium' for clarity (Grammar Problem Type ID: 26). The sentence 'know how it. Operate.' is fragmented and should be 'know how it operates' (Grammar Problem Type ID: 23).

× I think everyone should learn the basic science no science knowledge because I think some accident will happen is because they lack of the basic science knowledge.

✓ I think everyone should learn basic science knowledge because I think some accidents happen because they lack basic science knowledge.

'The basic science no science knowledge' is incorrect and confusing; it should be 'basic science knowledge' without 'the' (Grammar Problem Type ID: 22 and 14). 'Some accident will happen is because' is ungrammatical; it should be 'some accidents happen because' (Grammar Problem Type ID: 5 and 26). 'Lack of the basic science knowledge' should be 'lack basic science knowledge' (Grammar Problem Type ID: 11).

× I really into the science TV show because it is interesting and I and embolden my horizon when I was young.

✓ I was really into science TV shows because they are interesting and they broadened my horizons when I was young.

The phrase 'I really into' is missing the verb 'was' (Grammar Problem Type ID: 23). 'The science TV show' should be plural 'science TV shows' to match the context (Grammar Problem Type ID: 1). 'I and embolden my horizon' is incorrect; it should be 'they broadened my horizons' (Grammar Problem Type ID: 12 and 13). 'Horizon' should be plural 'horizons' as it is an idiomatic expression.