Science— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, correct grammatical errors, avoid fillers (uh), and use one clear reason with a supporting detail. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give a specific example and finish with a short concluding phrase. Also correct verb forms and pronunciation (physics).

例: I didn’t enjoy studying science at school. I found subjects like physics difficult, so I struggled to get good grades. For example, complex concepts and calculations confused me, which made me prefer languages such as English and French.

提案: Give a direct answer, then one clear example showing daily use. Remove repetitions and fillers. Use linking words (for example, so) to make the idea coherent and be specific about what calculations you do and why.

例: Yes, I do use some scientific knowledge in daily life. For example, because I enjoyed math as a child, I often mentally calculate dimensions or estimates when I see buildings or cars, so I can check whether something looks proportionate or suggest small improvements.

提案: Answer directly, correct awkward phrasing, avoid uncertain or vague expressions ("touched by a word"). Give a specific aspect of physics you want to learn and explain why, using linking words to connect ideas.

例: I would like to learn more about physics, especially classical mechanics and how forces affect motion. I found the subject fascinating at school but struggled with the pace, so now I follow well-known physicists and read their explanations to understand key concepts better.

提案: Be more precise and use correct noun forms and verbs. State one main reason why science is important, then give two specific benefits with linking words (for example, because/so). Avoid vague phrases such as "a lot of other things" and finish the sentence clearly.

例: Yes, I think everybody should study some science because it helps us understand the world and make informed decisions. For instance, learning about climate and physics can help people solve environmental problems and develop new technologies.

提案: Answer directly about current preference or past habit, correct channel name (National Geographic), and avoid repetition. Use one or two cohesive sentences: state whether you like such programs and give a specific example of a program and why you enjoyed it, using appropriate tense and subject-verb agreement.

例: Yes, I enjoyed watching science programs as a child. For example, I loved the show on National Geographic called Science for Dummies because the presenter explained experiments in simple, detailed steps, which made complex ideas easy to understand.

× To be honest, no, I didn't like, uh, studying science at school.

✓ To be honest, no, I didn't like studying science at school.

The original sentence includes an unnecessary comma after 'like' which interrupts the past-tense verb phrase. Removing the comma yields a natural past-tense statement. Keep the past tense 'didn't like' with the base verb 'study' (here 'studying') for correct form.

× It was very hard for me to get the grades in that, uh, specific subject like physis, physics and et cetera.

✓ It was very hard for me to get good grades in that specific subject, like physics, and so on.

Use of 'the grades' is awkward; 'good grades' is more natural. Remove the comma mid-clause and correct spelling 'physis' to 'physics'. Replace 'et cetera' with 'and so on' for spoken style. Ensure adjective 'specific' directly modifies 'subject' without an extra comma.

× Uh, my favorite uh, subjects in school was were, uh, English and French.

✓ My favorite subjects in school were English and French.

Subjects is plural, so the verb must be plural 'were' not 'was'. Remove filler words and extra commas to make the sentence grammatically correct and fluent.

× Well, in some cases, yes. Uh, I liked math when I was a small kid.

✓ Well, in some cases, yes. I liked math when I was a small child.

'A small kid' is informal and slightly awkward; 'a small child' or 'when I was a child' is more appropriate. Tense 'liked' is correct past; adjust word choice for naturalness.

× Uh, it was very enjoyable for me to solve all these, uh, hard equations, yes.

✓ It was enjoyable for me to solve these difficult equations.

Remove extraneous fillers and reorder for clarity: 'these difficult equations' is more natural than 'all these, uh, hard equations, yes.' Use 'difficult' as a standard adjective and keep the past-tense context consistent.

× So I, when I see something that doesn't add up, uh, maybe on the streets, on the street, like a building or a car or something, I do the math and try to find the solution to help improve that situation.

✓ So when I see something that doesn't add up, maybe on the street, like a building or a car, I do the math and try to find a solution to improve the situation.

Use 'on the street' (singular) rather than 'on the streets' in this context. Remove redundant commas and fillers. Use 'a solution' (general) and 'improve the situation' for natural collocation.

× I prefer to learn more about physics.

✓ I would like to learn more about physics.

The question asks about a subject they'd like to learn more about; 'I would like' is more natural for expressing preference for future learning than simple present 'I prefer.' Both are possible, but 'would like to learn more' fits context better.

× It was a very interesting subject when I was in school, but I didn't have the mental capability to, to learn all that information all at once.

✓ It was a very interesting subject when I was in school, but I didn't have the mental capacity to learn all that information at once.

Use 'mental capacity' (common collocation) rather than 'mental capability.' Remove the repeated 'to' and change 'all at once' (not 'all that information all at once' redundancy) for conciseness.

× So I was, uh, touched by, uh, a word, uh, known, uh, physicist.

✓ So I was influenced by a well-known physicist.

Original uses incorrect phrasing 'touched by a word known physicist' which is ungrammatical. 'Influenced by a well-known physicist' is clear. Replace pronoun/phrase confusion with proper noun phrase.

× I followed them for years and they made great hypothesis.

✓ I followed him/her/them for years, and they proposed great hypotheses.

'Hypothesis' is singular; plural is 'hypotheses.' Also 'made hypothesis' is incorrect collocation—use 'proposed' or 'made' with 'hypotheses.' Clarify the pronoun: if referring to a single physicist use 'him' or 'her' and then 'he/she proposed'; if plural 'them' and 'they proposed.' Use a comma before 'and' for clarity.

× Yes, absolutely, because the science explains everything that is going on in the universe, like perhaps the Milky Way, the galaxies, the planets, the air and a lot of other things.

✓ Yes, absolutely, because science explains everything that is going on in the universe, such as the Milky Way, galaxies, planets, the atmosphere, and many other things.

Do not use 'the' before 'science' when speaking generally: use 'science' not 'the science.' 'The galaxies' -> 'galaxies' is fine; 'the atmosphere' is more precise than 'the air.' Use 'such as' rather than 'like perhaps' for examples, and 'many other things' instead of 'a lot of other things.'

× So it is very important to know all these things, to be capable to do more with this information, like to explore new things, to do some new scientific.

✓ So it is very important to know these things, to be able to do more with this information, such as explore new things and carry out new scientific work.

Use 'to be able to' rather than 'to be capable to.' Remove redundant 'all' and simplify. 'To do some new scientific' is incomplete; use 'carry out new scientific work' or 'conduct new scientific research.' Use parallel infinitive structure and appropriate collocations.

× When I was a little kid, I always had fun when I watched my favorite TV show in the channel that is called National Geography.

✓ When I was a little kid, I always had fun watching my favorite TV show on the channel called National Geographic.

Use the gerund 'watching' after 'had fun.' 'On the channel' is correct preposition. Correct the channel name to 'National Geographic.' Remove unnecessary relative clause 'that is' for conciseness.

× The TV show was called Science for Dummies.

✓ The TV show was called 'Science for Dummies'.

In spoken text quotes are fine but in grammar corrections it's acceptable to mark the title. Also ensure punctuation around titles; here in plain text keep the title intact. (If titles must be unquoted, keep as is.)

× It's like he explained every scientific experiment in the details.

✓ He explained every scientific experiment in detail.

Use 'in detail' (idiomatic) not 'in the details.' Remove 'It's like' which is filler; keep past tense 'explained' consistent.

× He made it so easy for me to understand.

✓ He made it very easy for me to understand.

This sentence is acceptable; change 'so' to 'very' for formality if desired. Tense and structure are correct.

× He always do this.

✓ He always does this.

Subject 'He' requires third person singular verb form 'does' not 'do.' Use present simple 'always does' to describe habitual action.