Science— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and fillers, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoyed studying science at school because I found experiments very engaging. For example, biology labs where we dissected plants helped me understand how organisms work, and that hands-on experience made the lessons memorable.

提案: Clarify your point and give a concrete, relevant example. Use linking words (for example, because) and avoid unclear phrases. Limit to one topic sentence plus one specific example.

例: Yes, I use basic science knowledge every day. For example, I apply basic chemistry when cooking — I know how heat changes ingredients — and I use principles of hygiene, like understanding how soap removes germs.

提案: Be precise and coherent. State the subject clearly (e.g., cancer biology), then give a concise reason with a personal link if relevant. Use linking words (because, so) and correct vocabulary (nervous system).

例: Yes, I would like to learn more about cancer biology because a family member had surgery seven years ago and I want to understand how tumors develop and how treatments work.

提案: Make a clear, logical statement and support it with a specific reason. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'didn't know') and linking words (because, so that). Keep it concise.

例: Yes, it is important for everyone to study science because it helps people make safer everyday decisions. For instance, understanding basic physics and first-aid can reduce accidents and improve health outcomes.

提案: Answer directly and give a brief reason or contrast. Use linking words (instead, because) and provide a specific example of what you watch.

例: No, I don't usually watch science programs; instead, I prefer history documentaries because I enjoy learning about past events and how they shaped the present, such as films about World War II.

× Yeah, I enjoyed the uh, studying science at school. Especially I like. Uh, excuse.

✓ Yes, I enjoyed studying science at school. I especially liked it.

The student mixed past and present incorrectly. 'Enjoyed' indicates past, so follow-up should use past 'liked' and include the object 'it'. Remove unnecessary 'the' before 'studying'. Suggestion: Keep consistent tense and complete the clause (I especially liked it).

× Yeah, I use my science knowledge, uh, daily. Uh, for example, brace is a science, uh, in my daily life. Please sing oxygen.

✓ Yes, I use my science knowledge daily. For example, breathing and oxygen are part of science in my daily life.

The sentence had unclear words and noun issues. 'Brace' and 'Please sing' are incorrect. Use 'breathing' (a gerund) and 'oxygen' as nouns; use plural verb agreement 'are' to link them. Remove filler and extra commas. Suggestion: Use clear vocabulary and correct verb forms (gerund for activities).

× I'd like to run about, uh, cancer, uh, because, uh, seven years ago I, my nervous was, uh, cut it. So I'm curious, Council.

✓ I'd like to learn about cancer because seven years ago my nerves were damaged. So I'm curious to learn more.

Multiple issues: 'run about' should be 'learn about' (wrong verb), 'my nervous was cut it' is ungrammatical — likely meaning 'my nerves were damaged' (passive past). 'Council' is incorrect word choice. Use past passive 'were damaged' and infinitive 'to learn more'. Suggestion: Use correct verbs (learn), passive form for injury (were damaged), and clear vocabulary."

× Yeah, it's important for everyone to study science because if, uh, we. Didn't knew science way would to be accident.

✓ Yes, it's important for everyone to study science because if we don't know science, accidents can happen.

Incorrect tense and word order: 'Didn't knew' mixes auxiliary and past form; correct negative present is 'do not know' or contraction 'don't know'. 'Would to be accident' is ungrammatical; use 'accidents can happen' or 'it can lead to accidents'. Suggestion: Use correct auxiliary verbs (do/does) and modal 'can' for possibility, and keep subject-verb order standard."

× And no, I don't prefer to watch, uh, science television. I usually watch uh. Uh, history documentary.

✓ No, I don't prefer watching science programs. I usually watch history documentaries.

Avoid starting with 'And no'; use 'No' alone. 'Prefer to watch' is acceptable but 'prefer watching' is more natural. 'History documentary' needs plural or article: 'history documentaries' or 'a history documentary'. Suggestion: Use gerund after 'prefer' or rephrase and ensure noun agreement (documentaries).