Science— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子结构混乱，时态与语法错误较多，回答也较冗长。应直接回应问题并用一至两句补充具体细节，注意时态一致和简洁表达。练习把复杂句拆成主句＋1个补充句，用正确的过去时或现在时表达经历或现状。

例: Yes, I did enjoy studying science at school. For example, in primary and middle school I was fascinated by microbes and often read about them, but I later chose to study economics at university so I no longer take science courses.

提案: 表达较清楚但有语法与词汇错误，逻辑衔接词可以更自然。建议先给出直接答案，再用具体例子说明何时会使用科学知识，注意冠词和单复数形式。

例: Not usually. In most daily situations I rely on common sense, but I sometimes use scientific knowledge when troubleshooting computer problems or explaining simple technical issues.

提案: 语言不准确且有词汇错误（例如 'fond of' 用法与语序、'king' 应为 'keen'）。句子冗长且含义模糊。建议先明确列出想学的科目，再简短说明原因或兴趣来源，使用正确形容词和固定搭配。

例: Yes. I would like to learn more about the marine ecosystem and astronomy because I was keen on these topics as a child and still find them fascinating.

提案: 观点明确但表述有重复和不自然的短语（如 'eliminate the people's mistakes about some common sense'）。建议用更自然的表达说明原因，并给出具体例子，避免重复词。

例: Yes, I think basic scientific knowledge is important because it helps people make better decisions, for example about health and the environment, and promotes more efficient daily living.

提案: 时态与语法错误明显（如 'had stopped updating since five years ago' 和 'haven't watching'）。应使用正确时态并简洁说明时间点或频率，同时避免不必要的细节。

例: I used to watch CCTV-10, a science channel, but it stopped updating about five years ago, so I haven't watched it since then.

× Where when I was in primary school and middle school we had been taught with science lessons and I had interested in researching the microbes.

✓ When I was in primary and middle school we were taught science lessons and I was interested in researching microbes.

句中时态和被动/状态动词使用不当："had been taught"（过去完成进行/完成被动）在此句只是描述过去经常发生的事实，应使用一般过去被动"were taught"；"I had interested" 错用过去完成或形态，应为系动词+形容词结构"I was interested"。建议：描述过去习惯或事实用一般过去时，描述兴趣用"be + interested in + 名词/动名词"结构。

× However, I choose the economy major in university so I do not have science lessons now.

✓ However, I chose an economics major at university so I do not have science lessons now.

时态和词形错误："choose" 为一般现在，句子在谈过去选择专业，应使用一般过去"chose"；"economy major" 用法不合适，应为"economics major"；介词和冠词也需调整为常用搭配"major in"或"an economics major at university"。建议：表达过去选择用一般过去时；学习专业用固定搭配。

× Almost of the occasions I may not use my science knowledge because we can solve it with our common sense.

✓ On most occasions I may not use my science knowledge because we can solve problems with common sense.

词组搭配和量词使用错误："Almost of the occasions" 不地道，改为"On most occasions"或"Almost on all occasions"；"solve it" 指代不明确，改为复数或一般名词"solve problems"；不需要冠词"our"或可省略。建议：固定搭配学习并确保代词指代清晰。

× However, in some special condition like addressing some computer problems, I will use the knowledge taught by my science teacher.

✓ However, in some special conditions, such as when addressing certain computer problems, I will use the knowledge taught by my science teachers.

介词和单复数使用有误："in some special condition" 应为复数或使用不定冠词"in some special conditions"或"in a special condition"；"like addressing" 前应用"such as"或引导从句更自然；"some computer problems" 可改为"certain computer problems"；"science teacher" 若泛指多名教师应用复数。建议：注意可数名词单复数和习惯搭配"such as"、"when + 从句"。

× Yes, it is pitiful that I stopped learning about science lessons after high school.

✓ Yes, it's a pity that I stopped learning science after high school.

句子用词和结构冗余："it is pitiful" 不常用于表达遗憾，常用"it's a pity"或"it's unfortunate"；"learning about science lessons" 冗长，简化为"learning science"。建议：用地道短语表达情感并简化重复成分。

× However, I've fond of learning some knowledge about the marine ecosystem and the astronomy, which I was king when I was a kid.

✓ However, I've always enjoyed learning about the marine ecosystem and astronomy, which I liked when I was a kid.

形容词/动词形式和拼写错误："I've fond of" 应为"I've been fond of"或更自然"I've always enjoyed"；"the astronomy" 不需要定冠词，改为"astronomy"；"which I was king" 为拼写/词语错误，疑为"which I was keen on"或"which I liked"。建议：注意固定搭配（be fond of/be keen on/enjoy）和词拼写。

× Sure, because the basic knowledge of science can eliminate the people's mistakes about some common sense.

✓ Sure, because basic scientific knowledge can eliminate people's misconceptions about common sense.

量词和名词搭配错误："the basic knowledge of science" 可更自然地表达为"basic scientific knowledge"；"the people's mistakes about some common sense" 结构生硬，改为"people's misconceptions about common-sense issues"。建议：使用常见搭配和更精确的名词（misconceptions）。

× Meanwhile, it will help people to live more effectively and and scientifically.

✓ Meanwhile, it will help people live more effectively and more scientifically.

重复单词和副词位置：句中重复"and"且"scientifically" 与"effectively" 为副词，应并列使用"more effectively and more scientifically"或"live more effectively and scientifically"；去掉多余的"and"。建议：避免重复单词，副词并列保持一致。

× I used to like watching the CCTV 10, which was a specially designed science program by the national television.

✓ I used to like watching CCTV-10, which was a specially designed science program on the national television.

时态与介词/冠词：整体时态正确，但搭配应为"on the national television" 或更自然"on national television"；频道名称一般写作"CCTV-10"。建议：注意节目/频道的常见书写和介词搭配。

× However, it had stopped updating since five years ago, so I haven't watching it since then.

✓ However, it stopped updating five years ago, so I haven't watched it since then.

时态错误和动词形式："had stopped updating since five years ago" 时态混用且 since 后接具体起点应用现在完成时或简单过去，改为"stopped updating five years ago"；"I haven't watching it" 动名词错误，应为完成时的过去分词"I haven't watched it"。建议：注意since的用法（与现在完成时连用）及完成时态需用过去分词形式。