Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够清晰，语法错误较多，表达不自然。建议简洁明了地说明开始使用互联网的时间，并注意时态和句子结构。

例: I started using the internet when I was in high school because my family bought a new computer at that time.

提案: 回答内容较简单，表达不够流畅，存在语法和发音错误。建议使用连词使句子更连贯，并具体说明上网的活动。

例: I go online almost every day to chat with my friends, watch short videos, and sometimes do my homework.

提案: 回答不清楚且语法错误严重，表达不连贯。建议明确说明被禁止上网的时间和原因，并用正确的语法表达。

例: Yes, when I was in high school, my mother didn't allow me to use the internet because she thought it would distract me from studying.

提案: 回答较好，但句子连接不够自然，部分表达不够准确。建议使用更自然的连接词，并注意表达的准确性。

例: Yes, I spend several hours online every day, which I think is not a good habit. Recently, I have started exercising instead of spending too much time in front of the screen.

提案: 回答不连贯，表达含糊且有语法错误。建议用完整句子表达没有互联网时的活动，并避免使用不恰当的词汇。

例: Without the internet, I would spend my time playing with my Lego models, walking my dog, and reading books.

× If I'm not mistaken, I start using then so I was a permanent school students as at high my family bought knew compute, so I have chance to use Internet.

✓ If I'm not mistaken, I started using it when I was a high school student because my family bought a new computer, so I had a chance to use the Internet.

这里应该使用过去时态，因为描述的是过去发生的事情。动词start应改为started，have改为had，表示过去的动作和状态。

× If I'm not mistaken, I start using then so I was a permanent school students as at high my family bought knew compute, so I have chance to use Internet.

✓ If I'm not mistaken, I started using it when I was a high school student because my family bought a new computer, so I had a chance to use the Internet.

students应为student，表示单数，因为指的是自己一个人。compute应为computer，拼写错误。

× If I'm not mistaken, I start using then so I was a permanent school students as at high my family bought knew compute, so I have chance to use Internet.

✓ If I'm not mistaken, I started using it when I was a high school student because my family bought a new computer, so I had a chance to use the Internet.

as at high应改为when I was a high school student，使用正确的时间状语表达。

× Almost every day I will do a lot of things online such as checking with my friend, watching short we do's and so on.

✓ Almost every day I do a lot of things online such as chatting with my friends, watching short videos and so on.

描述习惯动作时应使用一般现在时，will do不合适。checking with my friend应为chatting with my friends，短语和复数形式错误。we do's应为videos，拼写错误。

× Yes, well, I was a high school student. My mom was too strict about ignant because she wore it. I can't focus on my study and get a good great.

✓ Yes, well, I was a high school student. My mom was too strict about internet use because she worried it would affect me. I couldn't focus on my studies and get good grades.

描述过去情况应使用过去时，can't改为couldn't，get a good great应为get good grades，拼写和表达错误。wore it应为worried about it。

× Yes, definitely I will spend several hours on line every day. I think it isn't a good habit, I want to change it. Or recently I started to do some exercise instead of watching screen.

✓ Yes, definitely I spend several hours online every day. I think it isn't a good habit, and I want to change it. Recently, I have started to do some exercise instead of watching screens.

描述习惯动作用一般现在时，will spend改为spend。最近开始的动作用现在完成时，started改为have started。watching screen应为watching screens。

× Maybe playing my Lego models? Walking my dog, reading books. Take care, help me kill this high.

✓ Maybe I would play with my Lego models, walk my dog, and read books. Taking care of myself helps me relieve stress.

原句缺少主语和谓语，句子结构不完整。应补充主语和谓语，使句子完整通顺。最后一句表达不清，改为更合适的表达。