Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“sign out before a social media platform”表达不清晰。建议使用更准确的表达，并注意时态和拼写。回答应更简洁且逻辑清晰。

例: I started using the Internet when I was in middle school. At that time, it was a new and exciting way to find information and talk with my friends online.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰，如“or are using to check emails, learn the newest news which videos”不通顺。建议简化句子结构，使用正确的连接词，并注意词汇搭配。

例: I usually go online every day for work, study, or leisure. I use the Internet to check emails, watch the latest news videos, and keep in touch with my friends and family.

提案: 回答较完整，但最后一句“and developer”不完整且不清楚。建议补充完整句子，使用更准确的词汇，并注意时态一致。

例: Yes, during high school, my parents limited my Internet use because they thought it would distract me from studying. This helped me concentrate better on my schoolwork and improve my grades.

提案: 回答中有多处语法和表达错误，如“is easy”，“make sure to make balance with offline activities like exciting I'm reading”。建议简化表达，注意语法和句子结构，使回答更自然流畅。

例: Sometimes, yes. It's easy to lose track of time when I browse the Internet or use social media. I try to balance my online time with offline activities like reading, which helps me stay healthy.

提案: 回答中断句不完整，语法错误较多，如“becauses of for much work I didn't have time to read book nowadays”。建议重组句子，表达更清晰，避免语法错误。

例: That's a good question. If I didn't have the Internet, I would read books instead because I don't have much time to read them nowadays due to work.

× I remember I started using the Internet when I was in the middle school.

✓ I remember I started using the Internet when I was in middle school.

“middle school”前不需要冠词“the”，因为它是不可数名词，表示一个阶段。

× I sign out before a social media platform and communicated with my classmates on line.

✓ I signed up for a social media platform and communicated with my classmates online.

“sign out”是登出，应该用“sign up for”表示注册；“before”用错了，应该用“for”；“on line”应写作一个词“online”。

× The Internet is an essential part of my daily life or are using to check emails, learn the newest news which videos and stay connected with my friends and family.

✓ The Internet is an essential part of my daily life and I use it to check emails, learn the newest news and watch videos, and stay connected with my friends and family.

原句中“or are using”结构错误，缺少主语，应改为“I use it”；“which videos”不合适，应改为“and watch videos”。

× My parents were quite strict about screen time and believe that excessive Internet use could distract me from my studies.

✓ My parents were quite strict about screen time and believed that excessive Internet use could distract me from my studies.

前半句用过去时“were”，后半句“believe”应与之时态一致，改为过去式“believed”。

× This restriction helped me focus better on my schoolwork and developer.

✓ This restriction helped me focus better on my schoolwork and development.

“developer”是“开发者”，应改为名词“development”表示“发展”。

× Sometimes yes, is easy to lose track of time when I am browsing the Internet or using social media.

✓ Sometimes, yes, it is easy to lose track of time when I am browsing the Internet or using social media.

句子缺少主语“it”，导致结构不完整。

× I try to be mindful of how much time I spent online and make sure to make balance with offline activities like exciting I'm reading is important to maintain a healthy life.

✓ I try to be mindful of how much time I spend online and make sure to balance it with offline activities like exercising and reading, which are important to maintain a healthy life.

“spent”应为现在时“spend”，因为前面是现在时态；“make balance”应改为“balance it”；“exciting”应为“exercising”；句子结构混乱，需调整。

× I think if I. Don't have the Internet, I will read books instead becauses of for much work I didn't have time to read book nowadays.

✓ I think if I don't have the Internet, I will read books instead because I have so much work that I don't have time to read books nowadays.

“becauses of for”错误，应为“because”；“didn't have”时态不对，应为现在时“don't have”；“book”应为复数“books”。