Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: คำตอบของคุณมีข้อผิดพลาดทางไวยากรณ์และการใช้คำซ้ำซ้อน ควรปรับปรุงการใช้ tense ให้ถูกต้องและหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำซ้อน เพื่อให้คำตอบดูเป็นธรรมชาติและชัดเจนมากขึ้น

例: I started using the Internet in 2015 because I wanted to search for new knowledge and information online.

提案: คำตอบของคุณมีความชัดเจนแต่ควรปรับปรุงการใช้คำและไวยากรณ์ เช่น การใช้คำกริยาให้ถูกต้องและหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำซ้อน เพื่อให้คำตอบดูเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น

例: Nowadays, I go online every day. I spend a lot of time using social media to post my activities, share new information, and learn new lessons.

提案: คำตอบนี้มีข้อผิดพลาดทางไวยากรณ์และโครงสร้างประโยค ควรใช้ tense ให้ถูกต้องและปรับปรุงโครงสร้างประโยคให้สมบูรณ์และชัดเจนมากขึ้น

例: I wasn't allowed to use the Internet during working hours, from 8:00 AM to 5:00 PM. I didn't allow myself to go online or use social media during that time.

提案: คำตอบนี้มีข้อผิดพลาดทางไวยากรณ์และการใช้คำไม่เหมาะสม ควรปรับปรุงการใช้ tense และโครงสร้างประโยคให้สมบูรณ์ รวมถึงใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหลของประโยค

例: Yes, I spend a lot of time online, especially on social media platforms, which sometimes makes me waste time that I could use for new activities or focusing on my family.

提案: คำตอบนี้มีข้อผิดพลาดทางไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ที่ไม่เหมาะสม ควรใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้องและเลือกใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสมเพื่อให้คำตอบดูเป็นธรรมชาติและชัดเจน

例: If I didn't have the Internet, I would read books, exercise, go for a run, go shopping at the mall, and do other activities.

× I starting using the Internet from 2000 15.

✓ I started using the Internet in 2015.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'starting' instead of the past tense 'started'. The verb 'start' should be in past tense to match the time reference 'from 2015'. Also, '2000 15' is unclear and should be corrected to '2015'.

× I I would like to searching the the new the new knowledge from Internet and uh.

✓ I would like to search for new knowledge from the Internet.

The phrase 'would like to searching' is incorrect; after 'would like to', the base form of the verb 'search' should be used. Also, 'the the new the new knowledge' is repetitive and should be simplified. 'From Internet' needs the definite article 'the'.

× Nowaday, I go online every day.

✓ Nowadays, I go online every day.

The word 'Nowaday' is a misspelling; the correct adverb is 'Nowadays' to indicate the current time period.

× I spend a lot of time to use social media online, to posting my activity, to share new information and to learn new lesson online.

✓ I spend a lot of time using social media online, posting my activities, sharing new information, and learning new lessons online.

After 'spend time', the verb should be in the '-ing' form, not 'to use'. Also, parallel structure requires all verbs to be in the same form. 'Activity' should be plural 'activities' and 'lesson' should be plural 'lessons' to match the context.

× The time I weren't allowed to use the Internet during working time from 8:00 until 5:00 evening.

✓ The time I wasn't allowed to use the Internet was during working hours from 8:00 until 5:00 in the evening.

The sentence lacks the verb 'was' to link the subject and predicate. 'Weren't' should be 'wasn't' to agree with the singular subject 'time'. 'Working time' is better expressed as 'working hours'. Also, '5:00 evening' should be '5:00 in the evening'.

× I not allow myself to go online or use social media.

✓ I was not allowed to go online or use social media.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'I not allow myself'; the correct passive form is 'I was not allowed'. The reflexive pronoun 'myself' is unnecessary here.

× Yes, I spent a lot of time, uh, for online and social media platform.

✓ Yes, I spend a lot of time on online and social media platforms.

The question is about current habits, so present tense 'spend' is appropriate. Also, 'for online and social media platform' should be 'on online and social media platforms' to use correct preposition and plural form.

× So make me a waste of time to do new activity or to focus on, uh, family and.

✓ So it makes me waste time that I could use to do new activities or focus on my family.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Make me a waste of time' is incorrect; it should be 'makes me waste time'. 'New activity' should be plural 'new activities'. The phrase 'focus on, uh, family and' is incomplete and should be completed as 'focus on my family'.

× If we don't the Internet, I usually retain the book and exercise, go for a run and shopping in the shopping mall and do activity.

✓ If we didn't have the Internet, I would usually read books, exercise, go for a run, go shopping in the shopping mall, and do other activities.

The sentence is missing the verb 'have' after 'don't'. The verb 'retain' is incorrect; 'read' is appropriate. 'Shopping' needs the verb 'go' before it. The sentence also needs to be in the conditional past form to match the hypothetical situation. 'Do activity' should be 'do other activities'.