Breakfast— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally good but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more concise. For example, use 'vitamins' instead of 'vitamin', and 'revitalizes' instead of 'revitalize'. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas smoothly with linking words.

例: I usually eat cereals and yogurt topped with fruits and nuts for breakfast because they are rich in protein, calcium, and vitamins, which provide essential nutrients. Moreover, I drink black coffee as it revitalizes me and keeps me alert throughout the day.

提案: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific. For example, replace 'very essential' and 'very necessary' with stronger vocabulary and avoid repeating the same idea.

例: Yes, I believe breakfast is crucial because it supplies the necessary nutrients at the start of the day, enabling us to work effectively and maintain energy levels throughout.

提案: Your answer has some repetition and grammatical errors. Try to avoid repeating words like 'usually' and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to compare past and present routines clearly.

例: In my childhood, I usually had Indian breakfasts that were rich in oil and sweets. However, now I prefer a more balanced meal with additional nutrients and black coffee, which gives me energy to work out efficiently throughout the day.

提案: There are some grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases like 'ballast diet' and 'some time duration'. Use correct terms and clearer expressions. Also, avoid repeating 'so' and improve sentence flow with linking words.

例: I recently changed my morning routine after learning about the harmful effects of sugar and oil on health. Now, I follow a balanced diet and plan to maintain it for the foreseeable future.

× These foods are rich in protein, calcium, vitamin which provides me essential nutrients.

✓ These foods are rich in protein, calcium, and vitamins which provide me essential nutrients.

The word 'vitamin' should be plural 'vitamins' because it refers to multiple types of vitamins. Also, 'which provides' should be 'which provide' to agree with the plural subject 'protein, calcium, and vitamins'.

× Moreover, I drink black coffee because it revitalize me for whole day and keep me alert.

✓ Moreover, I drink black coffee because it revitalizes me for the whole day and keeps me alert.

The verb 'revitalize' needs to be in third person singular form 'revitalizes' to agree with the subject 'it'. Also, 'for whole day' requires the definite article 'the' to become 'for the whole day'. The verb 'keep' should be 'keeps' to agree with singular subject 'it'. These corrections ensure subject-verb agreement and proper article usage.

× Well, breakfast is very essential as it provides the basic nutritions in the start of the day so that we can work effectively and efficiently whole day without any loss of energy.

✓ Well, breakfast is very essential as it provides the basic nutrition at the start of the day so that we can work effectively and efficiently the whole day without any loss of energy.

The word 'nutritions' is incorrect; 'nutrition' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized. Also, 'in the start of the day' should be 'at the start of the day' because 'at' is the correct preposition for specific points in time. Additionally, 'whole day' requires the definite article 'the' to become 'the whole day'. These changes correct quantifier usage and prepositions.

× Well, usually in my childhood I had usually Indian breakfast which was full of oil and sweet.

✓ Well, usually in my childhood I usually had Indian breakfast which was full of oil and sweets.

The word 'sweet' should be plural 'sweets' because it refers to various sweet items. Also, the adverb 'usually' is better placed before the verb 'had' for correct word order. These corrections address pluralization and adverb placement.

× Now I prefer to balance it with some more nutrients and black coffee which provides me energy to workout whole day efficiently.

✓ Now I prefer to balance it with more nutrients and black coffee which provides me energy to work out the whole day efficiently.

The phrase 'some more nutrients' is better as 'more nutrients' for natural expression. The verb 'workout' should be two words 'work out' when used as a verb. Also, 'whole day' requires the definite article 'the' to become 'the whole day'. These corrections improve adjective use, verb form, and article usage.

× Well I had recently changed my morning routine after getting to know about the adverse effect of sugar and oil on our health.

✓ Well, I recently changed my morning routine after learning about the adverse effects of sugar and oil on our health.

The past perfect tense 'had recently changed' is unnecessary here; simple past 'recently changed' is appropriate. 'Getting to know about' is better expressed as 'learning about'. 'Effect' should be plural 'effects' because it refers to multiple impacts. These changes correct tense usage, verb choice, and pluralization.

× So now I'm on the ballast diet.

✓ So now I'm on the ballast diet.

The word 'ballast' is likely a misspelling or incorrect word choice; if the intended word is 'balanced', it should be corrected to 'balanced diet'. However, since it is not in the grammar problem list, no correction is made here.

× So I think I would stick to my diet for some time duration now.

✓ So I think I will stick to my diet for some time now.

The modal verb 'would' is incorrect here for expressing future intention; 'will' is appropriate. The phrase 'some time duration' is unnatural; 'some time' suffices. These corrections improve modal verb usage and natural expression of duration.