Breakfast— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and incomplete sentences. Also, avoid asking the examiner a question like 'and you' as it is not appropriate in this context. Keep your answer concise and clear, and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I usually eat aloo paratha for breakfast. Sometimes, I have idli with sambar. On weekends, I prefer poha accompanied by lemon water.

提案: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and try to use more precise vocabulary. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent. For example, use 'because' and 'therefore' to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I believe breakfast is the most important meal of the day because it provides energy for the day ahead. If you skip or have a poor breakfast, you may feel tired and exhausted. Therefore, a nutritious breakfast leads to a productive day.

提案: Try to reduce filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words such as 'however' or 'whereas' to contrast past and present. Also, be more specific about your feelings or experiences.

例: Yes, there are differences. During my childhood, my mother cooked breakfast, which I enjoyed very much. However, now I work and eat breakfast at the mess, where the menu is decided by seniors, so I have no choice.

提案: Avoid repetition such as 'and I and I'. Try to make your answer more concise and use linking words like 'because' to explain your opinion clearly.

例: No, I don't want to change my morning routine because I find it convenient. I usually get up at 8:00 and have breakfast by 8:30, which suits me well.

× I usually eat aloo paratha for breakfast and sometimes I have uh idli or sambar and you.

✓ I usually eat aloo paratha for breakfast and sometimes I have uh idli or sambar. And you?

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'and you' as part of the sentence without proper punctuation or structure. It should be separated as a question or a new sentence to make sense. Adding a question mark after 'And you?' clarifies that the speaker is asking the examiner about their breakfast habits.

× If the breakfast is not good, uh, you will feel exhausted and tired throughout the day.

✓ If breakfast is not good, uh, you will feel exhausted and tired throughout the day.

In English, when talking about meals in general, the definite article 'the' is usually omitted. Saying 'If breakfast is not good' is more natural and grammatically correct than 'If the breakfast is not good.'

× But now I'm working and I am having breakfast at mess where the breakfast is already, uh, selected by the seniors.

✓ But now I'm working and I am having breakfast in the mess where the breakfast is already, uh, selected by the seniors.

The correct preposition to use with 'mess' (a dining hall) is 'in' rather than 'at'. 'In the mess' indicates being inside the place, which is appropriate here.

× I usually get up by 8:00 and have breakfast by 8:30 and it is a convenient time for me and I really don't have any objections to the timing and I and I am OK with the routine.

✓ I usually get up by 8:00 and have breakfast by 8:30. It is a convenient time for me and I really don't have any objections to the timing. I am OK with the routine.

The original sentence is a run-on with repeated 'and I' and lacks proper punctuation. Breaking it into shorter sentences improves clarity and grammatical correctness. Also, removing the repeated phrase 'and I' corrects the pronoun misuse.