Breakfast— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence structure. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and correct minor grammatical errors.

例: I usually eat whatever is provided in my hostel menu. For example, one day I might have boiled eggs with bread and tea, and the next day, puri with potato curry and coffee. Sometimes, I also have an omelette with bread.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using more natural expressions and avoiding rhetorical questions. Also, try to use linking words to make your response more coherent.

例: In my opinion, breakfast is the most important meal because after a night's sleep, your body needs energy to function throughout the day. Eating a nutritious breakfast, along with a cup of tea or coffee, helps keep you energized and motivated. Therefore, I believe it's important not to skip breakfast.

提案: Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use clearer sentence structures and linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural. Also, be careful with word choice and pronunciation of brand names.

例: Mornings in my childhood were much better. My mother would wake me up with a big glass of milk and sometimes an energy drink like Pediasure. After that, I would have a nutritious breakfast, including dishes like upma, poha, idli, and dosa.

提案: Make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and using appropriate linking words. Also, use more common English terms for some items and improve sentence flow.

例: I would like to have a more wholesome breakfast that includes fruits or fruit juice and some nuts like almonds or cashews. I prefer less oily foods like idli and dosa instead of vada. Planning my breakfast according to my needs would improve my morning routine.

× I'm living in a hostel currently and my breakfast preference isn't usually my choice.

✓ I am living in a hostel currently and my breakfast preference is usually not my choice.

The phrase 'isn't usually my choice' is awkwardly placed; changing it to 'is usually not my choice' improves clarity and correctness. Also, 'I'm living' is acceptable but 'I am living' is more formal and fits the context better.

× And also sometimes you have an omelette compared which can be paired with bread.

✓ And also sometimes you have an omelette, which can be paired with bread.

The word 'compared' is incorrect here; it seems to be a misuse or typo. Removing 'compared' and adding a comma before 'which' corrects the sentence structure.

× In my point of view, breakfast is the most important meal of the day because you wake up from a deep sleep and you need energy to work the entire day.

✓ From my point of view, breakfast is the most important meal of the day because you wake up from a deep sleep and you need energy to work the entire day.

The correct preposition is 'from' in the phrase 'from my point of view', not 'in'. This is a common idiomatic expression.

× So you have to channelize your energy.

✓ So you have to channel your energy.

The verb 'channelize' is nonstandard in English; the correct verb is 'channel'. Also, 'channelize' is not commonly used and sounds awkward.

× Washing it down with a cup of tea or coffee can keep you boosted and motivated all day long.

✓ Washing it down with a cup of tea or coffee can keep you energized and motivated all day long.

The phrase 'keep you boosted' is informal and less appropriate here; 'keep you energized' is more suitable. Also, 'washing it down' is acceptable but could be clearer if context is maintained.

× Childhood mornings used to be way better.

✓ Childhood mornings used to be much better.

The word 'way' is informal; 'much' is more appropriate in formal or semi-formal speech.

× my mother used to wake me up to a big glass of milk with any energy drink like pediasure or complain.

✓ my mother used to wake me up with a big glass of milk and an energy drink like Pediasure or Complan.

The phrase 'wake me up to' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'wake me up with'. Also, 'any energy drink' is vague; specifying 'an energy drink' is better. 'Pediasure' and 'Complan' are brand names and should be capitalized.

× And after that I used to have a nutritious meal like a nutritious breakfast which included options like upma, poha, idli, dosa and so on and also.

✓ And after that, I used to have a nutritious breakfast which included options like upma, poha, idli, dosa, and so on.

The sentence is redundant and ends awkwardly with 'and also.' Removing redundancy and correcting the sentence structure improves clarity.

× I would love to have an even more wholesome breakfast which includes a few fruits or a fruit juice and some dry fruits like badams or cashew nuts along with my breakfast.

✓ I would love to have an even more wholesome breakfast which includes a few fruits or fruit juice and some dry fruits like badams or cashew nuts along with it.

'A fruit juice' is better as 'fruit juice' without 'a' because juice is uncountable. Also, 'along with my breakfast' is redundant since the items are part of the breakfast; 'along with it' is clearer.

× I would incline to less oily food like idli dosa instead of vada etcetera.

✓ I would prefer less oily food like idli and dosa instead of vada, etcetera.

The phrase 'incline to' is incorrect here; 'prefer' is the correct verb. Also, 'idli dosa' should be 'idli and dosa' for clarity.