Breakfast— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains grammatical errors. Try to complete your sentences and use correct articles and plural forms. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer natural and clear.

例: I usually have a cup of tea with a piece of bread spread with jam or cheese for breakfast.

提案: Your answer has good content but is interrupted by hesitations and filler words. Try to speak more fluently and organise your ideas clearly using linking words. Also, correct some word choices and grammar.

例: Yes, I think breakfast is important because people usually sleep for seven or eight hours and then don't eat anything for a long time. As a result, they might feel dizzy or even faint if they skip breakfast.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical mistakes and hesitations. Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood and try to link your ideas smoothly. Avoid repeating filler words.

例: Yes, there are differences. When I was a child, I didn't have any morning routines. I usually woke up at 9 or 10 o'clock, didn't eat breakfast, and just played with my dolls.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has many hesitations. Try to complete your sentences clearly and use correct verb tenses. Also, explain your reasons more specifically and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I would like to run for about 30 minutes before I go to work because it helps me to have a more relaxed day and feel more energetic.

× I usually have a cup of tea with piece of bread with jam or cheese and.

✓ I usually have a cup of tea with a piece of bread with jam or cheese.

The phrase 'piece of bread' is missing the article 'a' before 'piece'. Also, the sentence ends with 'and' which is incomplete and should be removed for clarity.

× Yes, because unusually people asleep for UH-7 or 8 hours and after that, uh, umm, as a result, they don't eat uh, anything for uh, about 8 hours.

✓ Yes, because usually people sleep for 7 or 8 hours and after that, as a result, they don't eat anything for about 8 hours.

The adverb 'unusually' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'usually'. Also, 'people asleep' is incorrect; it should be 'people sleep'. The filler words and hesitation sounds should be removed for clarity.

× Yes. Uh, uh, of course. Uh, when I was a child, I don't have any routines.

✓ Yes. Of course. When I was a child, I didn't have any routines.

The sentence refers to the past ('when I was a child'), so the verb should be in the past tense 'didn't have' instead of the present tense 'don't have'.

× Uh, for my mornings I just woke up and at 9:00 or 10:00 and after that I don't eat.

✓ For my mornings, I just woke up at 9:00 or 10:00 and after that I didn't eat.

The sentence is about past routines, so 'don't eat' should be changed to past tense 'didn't eat' to maintain tense consistency.

× I didn't eat anything and just play with my dolls.

✓ I didn't eat anything and just played with my dolls.

The verb 'play' should be in past tense 'played' to match the past tense context of the sentence.

× Yes, I would like to have a running time, uh, before I went, uh, before I go to uh, work about 30 minutes.

✓ Yes, I would like to have a running time, about 30 minutes, before I go to work.

The phrase 'before I went' is past tense and inconsistent with 'before I go'. The correct form is 'before I go' to indicate a future or habitual action. Also, the sentence is restructured for clarity.

× It's the way to, uh, have a relaxed day, to have a more relaxed day and uh, help me to be more.

✓ It's a way to have a more relaxed day and to help me feel better.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'Help me to be more' is incomplete and unclear. The correction completes the thought and improves sentence structure and clarity.