Breakfast— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid redundancy (e.g., “for daily life” and “so I think it’s really good choice for me” repeat). Use a linking word if adding a reason.

例: I usually have bread for breakfast. For example, I often eat whole‑grain toast with peanut butter because it gives me long‑lasting energy and keeps me full until lunch.

提案: Correct grammar and be specific: begin with a clear opinion sentence, avoid repetition (“provides us, provides us”), and give one or two specific reasons or examples using linking words like ‘because’ or ‘for example’.

例: Yes, I believe breakfast is very important because it refuels the body after sleep. For example, eating eggs and fruit gives me protein and vitamins that improve concentration in the morning.

提案: Structure the answer with a clear topic sentence stating similarity or difference, then give a specific comparison with one detail. Reduce hesitation words and repetitions.

例: They are mostly similar. When I was a child I also ate bread and eggs, and now I still have the same breakfast because it is quick and healthy.

提案: Give a concise direct answer and one clear reason with a linking word. Remove filler words and repeat information only once. State the benefit of the change specifically.

例: Yes, I would like to change it by waking up earlier. I currently get up at 6:00 AM, but I want to wake at 5:00 so I have an extra hour for exercise and planning, which makes my day more productive.

× I usually eat bread for breakfast because it provides me a lot of energy for daily life, so I think it's really good choice for me.

✓ I usually eat bread for breakfast because it provides me with a lot of energy for daily life, so I think it's a really good choice for me.

The noun phrase 'good choice' requires the indefinite article 'a' because it is a singular countable noun. Also add the preposition 'with' after 'provides me' to correctly indicate what is provided. Suggestion: use 'a' before singular countable nouns and include necessary prepositions: 'provides me with.' Grammar problem type ID: 1

× I think it's breakfast is really important for living daily life because it provides us, provides us a lot of variety of nutrients and some for example protein or vitamins, which is really important for our life.

✓ I think breakfast is really important for daily life because it provides us with a variety of nutrients, for example protein and vitamins, which are really important for our health.

Remove the extra 'it's' (sentence structure) and use 'breakfast' without 'the' in this general statement. Use 'provides us with' to include the correct preposition. 'A lot of variety of nutrients' is awkward; use 'a variety of nutrients.' List items should use 'and' not 'or' for examples, and 'which are' agrees with plural 'protein and vitamins.' Replace 'our life' with 'our health' for natural collocation. Grammar problem type ID: 17

× I think it's breakfast is really important for living daily life because it provides us, provides us a lot of variety of nutrients and some for example protein or vitamins, which is really important for our life.

✓ I think breakfast is really important for daily life because it provides us with a variety of nutrients, for example protein and vitamins, which are really important for our health.

'Variety' needs 'a variety of nutrients' not 'a lot of variety of nutrients.' Also 'protein and vitamins' is a plural list so the relative clause needs 'are' not 'is.' Suggest using 'a variety of' and ensure verb agreement. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× Uh, it's quite similar when, uh, similar as when I was a child because, umm, I ate same thing like bread and egg, which is, uh, same healthy as before. So I ate, I continually eat breakfast.

✓ Uh, it's quite similar to when I was a child because I ate the same things, like bread and eggs, which are as healthy as before. So I have continued to eat breakfast.

Use 'similar to' not 'similar as.' 'Same thing' should be plural 'the same things' when listing items; use 'eggs' plural. 'Which are' agrees with plural noun. To express a continuing habit from past to present, use present perfect 'have continued.' Also include the definite article 'the' with 'same things.' Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Uh, it's quite similar when, uh, similar as when I was a child because, umm, I ate same thing like bread and egg, which is, uh, same healthy as before. So I ate, I continually eat breakfast.

✓ Uh, it's quite similar to when I was a child because I ate the same things, like bread and eggs, which are as healthy as before. So I have continued to eat breakfast.

Use preposition 'to' after 'similar.' Use 'like' appropriately to introduce examples; better to say 'such as' or 'like bread and eggs.' Use 'as healthy as' for comparisons. For continuing action, 'have continued' is appropriate. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Uh, yes, I, yes, I would like to change my morning routine. Uh, I want to wake up earlier more than now. Uh, I wake up, I wake up at 6:00 AM recently, so I want to change, uh, wake up at 5:00, which is more productive day.

✓ Yes, I would like to change my morning routine. I want to wake up earlier than I do now. Recently I have been waking up at 6:00 AM, so I want to change to waking up at 5:00, which would make my day more productive.

Use 'earlier than' to compare times. 'Recently I have been waking up' uses present perfect continuous to describe a recent habit. Use 'change to waking up at 5:00' or 'change my wake-up time to 5:00.' 'Which would make my day more productive' uses conditional/modal 'would' to express likely result. Grammar problem type ID: 4