Breakfast— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần rút gọn câu trả lời và làm rõ từng ý. Tránh lặp từ và ngữ pháp sai (ví dụ: "be able to"). Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó nêu 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (loại thực phẩm, lý do). Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản để mạch lạc (for example, because, so).

例: I usually have a substantial breakfast to get enough energy for the morning. For example, I often eat rice or sticky rice with eggs and vegetables because it keeps me full and focused until lunchtime.

提案: Cần dùng thì đúng (present simple) và tránh lặp từ như "during the day" nhiều lần. Bắt đầu với câu chủ đề trực tiếp, giải thích lý do rõ ràng và đưa ra một ví dụ ngắn hoặc kết quả. Giảm tiếng ồm "uh" và ngắt quãng.

例: Yes, I think breakfast is very important. It provides energy and helps concentration, so I can study or work more effectively. For instance, when I eat breakfast I can focus better during morning classes.

提案: Chú ý ngữ pháp (thì quá khứ: "used to" hoặc "my parents took care of me"), sắp xếp ý rõ ràng: mô tả quá khứ rồi so sánh với hiện tại. Tránh dùng cấu trúc lặp và sửa lỗi động từ (dependent → independent? or "more independent").

例: Yes, they are different. When I was a child my parents used to prepare breakfast for me, so I didn't worry about food. Now I am more independent and I usually prepare my own breakfast before going out.

提案: Cần trả lời rõ ràng (Yes/No) và nêu lý do ngắn gọn. Tránh mâu thuẫn thì ("didn't I don't"). Kết thúc bằng câu hoàn chỉnh diễn tả kết luận. Giữ tối đa 3-4 câu.

例: No, I wouldn't change my morning routine. I have enough time to get ready and eat breakfast, so I feel comfortable and presentable before leaving. Because I rarely skip breakfast, my routine works well for me.

× I usually eat substantial amount of food so that I can be able to have enough energy to function well properly.

✓ I usually eat a substantial amount of food so that I can have enough energy to function properly.

Use 'a' with the singular countable noun 'amount' when modified by 'substantial'. 'Be able to' is redundant with 'can'; use one. 'Function well properly' is redundant; choose 'properly' or 'well'. Suggestion: say 'a substantial amount' and avoid redundant auxiliaries and adverbs.

× During the day, my meal usually like rice or sticky rice or something like that.

✓ During the day, my meals are usually rice or sticky rice or something like that.

Subject 'my meal' should be plural if referring to regular meals: 'my meals'. Use the verb 'are' to link subject and complement. 'Usually like' is incorrect; use 'are usually'. Suggestion: use plural 'meals' and proper verb 'are'.

× I I know that is very important part of the day so that I can be able to set up.

✓ I know that it is a very important part of the day because it helps me get going.

Missing subject 'it' and article 'a' before 'very important part'. 'So that I can be able to set up' is awkward and ungrammatical. Replace with clear clause 'because it helps me get going'. Suggestion: include 'it is a' and use a clear result clause.

× I believe that breakfast played very important role in, uh, helping people to function well, properly during the day.

✓ I believe that breakfast plays a very important role in helping people to function properly during the day.

Tense should be present 'plays' for a general truth. Need article 'a' before 'very important role'. 'Function well, properly' is redundant; choose 'properly'. Suggestion: use present simple for general facts and include 'a'.

× Like if we have enough food for the start of the day, it can help us to focus more on the thing that we are doing during the day, uh, concentrate more on our studying and working and.

✓ If we have enough food at the start of the day, it can help us focus more on what we are doing during the day and concentrate more on our studying and work.

Use 'at the start' not 'for the start'. Infinitive 'to focus' can omit 'to' after 'help'. 'The thing that we are doing' is wordy; use 'what we are doing'. 'Studying and working' better as 'studying and work'. Suggestion: simplify phrases and use correct preposition 'at'.

× when I was a child, my parent usually take took care of me, they bought me breakfast and they kind of, uh, cooked for me if they're possible of doing that during the day.

✓ When I was a child, my parents usually took care of me; they bought me breakfast and sometimes cooked for me if it was possible.

Use plural 'parents' not 'parent'. Past tense 'took' matches 'was'. 'They're possible of doing that' is incorrect; use 'if it was possible' or 'if they could'. Suggestion: pluralize 'parents', keep past tense consistent, and use 'if it was possible'.

× And now the role change, I mean, I kind of being more dependent, I have to prepare the food for myself.

✓ Now the role has changed; I mean, I am more independent, so I have to prepare food for myself.

'Role change' needs past participle: 'has changed'. 'I kind of being more dependent' is wrong: use 'I am more independent' (context shows independence). 'Prepare the food' can be 'prepare food'. Suggestion: use present perfect for change and correct verb 'am' with adjective.

× I'm not sure, I mean like I probably will keep everything as usual since I have enough time to take care of myself so that I can be presentable before I go, uh, before I go out and also I have enough time for my breakfast.

✓ I'm not sure; I will probably keep everything as usual since I have enough time to take care of myself so that I can be presentable before I go out, and I also have enough time for my breakfast.

Move 'probably' to follow 'will' for natural word order: 'will probably'. Remove repeated 'before I go'. Use conjunction 'and' to join clauses. Tense 'will' is fine for future intention. Suggestion: use natural adverb position and avoid repetition.

× I didn't I don't usually skip my breakfast, therefore I believe that I have the good.

✓ I don't usually skip my breakfast; therefore I believe that I am fine.

Mixed past and present: use present 'don't'. 'I have the good' is ungrammatical; likely meant 'I am in good health' or 'I am fine'. Suggestion: keep consistent tense and use correct expression such as 'I am fine' or 'I am healthy'.