Breakfast— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid awkward words like “Such,” and expand with one linked detail. Use linking words (e.g., “also” or “sometimes”) correctly and choose more natural expressions for portions (e.g., “a slice of toast” or “a glass of milk”).

例: I usually have a slice of toast and a glass of milk for breakfast. Sometimes I also eat fruit, like a banana or an apple, when I need extra energy.

提案: Correct grammar and use linking phrases properly. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give a reason using a linking phrase such as “not only…but also.” Fix verb forms and word choice (e.g., “satisfies,” “boosts,” “productive” used as an adverb should be “productively” but better to say “stay productive”).

例: Yes, I think breakfast is very important because it not only satisfies my hunger but also boosts my energy, which helps me stay productive throughout the morning.

提案: Good content and contrast. Improve fluency by using a clear linking word to compare past and present (e.g., “whereas” or “but now”) and add a brief reason for the change to be more specific.

例: When I was a child I usually woke up at around 7:00 AM because I had to go to school, whereas now I often wake up later because I have more flexible schedules and sometimes study or relax in the evening.

提案: Make the response grammatically correct and more formal. Avoid contractions like “wanna” in IELTS. Provide a clear reason and perhaps a how-to plan. Keep it to one topic sentence and one supporting detail with a linking word like “because” or “so that.”

例: Yes, I would like to get up earlier in the future because it would help me be more productive. For example, I plan to go to bed earlier and set an alarm to build a healthier routine.

× I usually eat a slice of bread and a bottle of milk at breakfast.

✓ I usually eat a slice of bread and a bottle of milk for breakfast.

Use of 'at breakfast' is not strictly wrong but 'for breakfast' is more natural collocation in English; this is a prepositional usage preference (classified here under singular/plural issue per list 1) and keeps nouns singular as intended.

× Sometimes I also eat some fruit. Such.

✓ Sometimes I also eat some fruit.

The word 'Such.' at the end is ungrammatical and unnecessary; remove it to form a complete, natural sentence. This is a sentence structure issue: extra fragment must be deleted.

× Yes, breakfast is crucial for me because it only satisfy my stomach but also boost my energy which helps me stay productively.

✓ Yes, breakfast is crucial for me because it not only satisfies my stomach but also boosts my energy, which helps me stay productive.

Multiple errors: 'only satisfy' should be 'not only satisfies' (missing 'not' and verb agreement), 'satisfy' needs third-person singular 'satisfies' and 'boost' needs 'boosts' to agree with singular subject 'breakfast'; 'productively' is an adverb but a description of 'stay' needs adjective 'productive'. The structure 'not only ... but also ...' must be used together.

× When I was a child I usually woke up early, like at 7:00 AM because I had to go to school.

✓ When I was a child, I usually woke up early, around 7:00 AM, because I had to go to school.

This sentence is largely correct but needs commas for clarity and 'like' is informal; 'around' is a better choice. This falls under past tense usage (ID 5) because the tense is past and should be consistent; punctuation and word choice improve formality.

× But nowadays I usually stay late.

✓ But nowadays I usually stay up late.

'Stay late' is understandable but the common collocation for remaining awake is 'stay up late.' This is a present-tense habit (ID 6) and requires the correct verb phrase.

× Yes, I want to get up earlier in the future because I. Don't wanna stay late in the evening?

✓ Yes, I want to get up earlier in the future because I don't want to stay up late in the evening.

Multiple issues: 'I.' is a fragment; 'Don't' should be 'don't' attached to the subject 'I'; 'wanna' is informal spoken slang — use 'want to'; punctuation should be a statement not a question. Also use 'stay up late' collocation. This is a sentence structure and register issue (ID 26).