Breakfast— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use correct verb forms and concise phrasing.

例: I usually eat a light breakfast, such as fresh fruit and oatmeal. For example, I often have a banana with a bowl of porridge because it’s quick to prepare and keeps me full until lunch.

提案: Provide a clear, concise reason and avoid unclear phrasing. Begin with a topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement and articles) will improve clarity.

例: Yes, I think breakfast is very important because it provides energy to start the day. For instance, eating cereal or eggs boosts my concentration in the morning and helps me avoid mid-morning hunger.

提案: Make the comparison clearer and more specific. State the main contrast first, then give specific examples of what has changed using linking words like 'for example' or 'now'. Correct word choice (e.g. 'past' → 'big', 'when I was a child') is needed.

例: Yes, my mornings are quite different now compared with my childhood. For example, when I was a child I woke up late and rushed to school, but now I wake up earlier and pay more attention to healthy breakfast and a regular routine.

提案: Give a clear plan of what you want to change and why, with one or two specific actions and expected benefits. Use concise sentences and correct tense/forms.

例: Yes, I would like to change my routine by waking up earlier and exercising for 20 minutes. By doing this and preparing my own breakfast, I hope to feel more energetic and less rushed during the day.

× For breakfast I usually want to eat light food like fruits, oatmeal which is also light and make me feel more full for so long.

✓ For breakfast I usually want to eat light foods like fruit and oatmeal, which are also light and make me feel fuller for a long time.

Errors: 'food' should be plural 'foods' or use uncountable 'food' with different structure; 'fruits' is often 'fruit' for general reference; 'which is' refers to oatmeal only and needs plural agreement if referring to both, so use 'which are' or rephrase; 'make me feel more full for so long' is unidiomatic — use 'make me feel fuller for a long time'. Suggestion: use correct noun number and adjective comparative 'fuller' and 'a long time' for duration. ID:8,1,13

× Yes, I think breakfast is very important for our body which help me help us to give quick energy for for a certain time and it's may cause more.

✓ Yes, I think breakfast is very important for our bodies, which helps us give quick energy for a certain time, and it may cause other effects.

Errors: 'our body' should be plural 'our bodies' (singular/plural issue); relative clause 'which help me help us' has wrong subject and verb form — use 'which helps us' (subject-verb agreement and incorrect pronoun); duplicate 'for' and awkward 'it's may cause more' — use 'it may cause other effects' or specify. Suggestion: match noun number, use correct verb form 'helps', and simplify the clause. ID:27,1,12,5

× Yes, there are very past differences between the morning when I was childhood and now.

✓ Yes, there were big differences between the mornings when I was a child and now.

Errors: 'very past differences' is incorrect word choice — use 'big' or 'significant differences' (adjective selection); 'there are' should match past time frame 'there were' (tense issue); 'when I was childhood' should be 'when I was a child' (incorrect noun form). Suggestion: use appropriate adjectives and correct noun phrase 'a child' and past tense 'were'. ID:13,5,22

× Because now I'm also careful about my food and my habits, That's why.

✓ Now I'm more careful about my food and my habits; that's why.

Errors: Sentence fragment 'Because now...' followed by 'That's why' is redundant and awkward — better combine into one sentence; capitalization error on 'That's'. Suggestion: remove 'Because' or connect clauses properly and use correct capitalization. ID:12,26

× Yes, I like to change my morning routine because nowadays I'm so much lazier than before.

✓ Yes, I'd like to change my morning routine because nowadays I'm much lazier than before.

Errors: 'I like to change' implies current habitual preference; for a desire to change use conditional 'I'd like' or 'I would like' (modal/tense nuance). 'so much lazier' is informal; use 'much lazier'. Suggestion: use 'I'd like' to express wish and simplify adverb placement. ID:10,7,20

× So I like to wake up earlier and do some exercise and make my breakfast by myself because I nowadays I'm so late.

✓ So I want to wake up earlier, do some exercise, and make my breakfast myself because these days I'm often late.

Errors: Repetition of 'and' can be streamlined with commas; 'I like to' should be 'I want to' or 'I would like to' to express intended change (modal nuance); 'by myself' is better as 'myself'; 'because I nowadays I'm so late' is ungrammatical — use 'because these days I'm often late'. Suggestion: use parallel verb forms, correct adverb placement ('these days'), and choose appropriate modal verb for intention. ID:16,7,20}]} PMID:0.24