Breakfast— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문법(특히 시제와 조동사), 어순, 그리고 자연스러운 표현을 개선해야 합니다. 예: 'I usually do not eat breakfast' 또는 'I'm not a morning person' 같은 표현을 사용하세요. 또한 문장을 더 간결히 하고 한두 개의 연결어를 사용해 흐름을 부드럽게 만드세요. 구체적으로: 부정문 시 'do not'를 사용하고, 'wake up' 앞에 'wake up early'와 같은 부사구를 추가하세요. 마지막으로 문장을 2~3문장으로 간결하게 정리하세요.

例: I usually don’t eat breakfast because I’m a night person and I find it hard to wake up early. As a result, I often skip straight to lunch instead.

提案: 의사를 분명히 전달하는 연습이 필요합니다. 부정 응답을 할 때는 이유를 명확히 말하고, 불필요한 중간 소리는 피하세요. 또한 'I like being empty in the morning'처럼 자연스러운 표현으로 수정하고, 연결어(For example, Because)를 사용해 이유를 설명하세요.

例: I don’t think breakfast is essential for me because I often feel uncomfortable eating early. For example, I prefer an empty stomach in the morning and only eat later in the day.

提案: 주제를 바로 말하고, 세부사항을 하나나 두 개로 제한해 구체적으로 설명하세요. 어순과 어휘를 고쳐 자연스럽게 표현하고, 연결어(For example, These days)를 사용하세요. ‘household number’ 대신 ‘household size’ 또는 ‘number of people in my household’ 같은 표현을 쓰세요.

例: The biggest difference is the number of people in my household. These days I live alone, so my mornings are quiet and I usually spend them by myself, unlike when I was a child and the house was busy.

提案: 의사표현은 명확하지만 문장을 더 자연스럽고 간결하게 다듬으세요. 'challenging question' 대신 'difficult'나 'a challenge'를 쓰고, 목적(why)과 방법(what you'll do)도 한 문장으로 연결하세요. 연결어(However, Therefore)를 사용하면 흐름이 좋아집니다.

例: Yes, I would like to change my morning routine because I want to become a morning person. Therefore, I plan to go to bed earlier and set an alarm to help me wake up earlier.

× Honestly I usually not eat breakfast because I'm a night person so I'm not good at wake up in the morning so I usually eat lunch first.

✓ Honestly I usually do not eat breakfast because I'm a night person, so I'm not good at waking up in the morning and I usually eat lunch first.

The sentence uses incorrect present tense constructions: 'usually not eat' should use do-support ('do not eat') and 'wake up' after 'good at' requires the gerund form 'waking up'. Combine clauses with appropriate conjunctions and punctuation for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'do not' for present simple negation, and use gerunds after 'good at'. Example: 'I usually do not eat breakfast because I'm a night person, so I'm not good at waking up in the morning.'

× Actually, no. Sometimes when I eat breakfast I feel burdened, but I don't have any problem. Even I don't uh. Something in the morning and I like empty.

✓ Actually, no. Sometimes when I eat breakfast I feel burdened, but it's not a problem. I don't do much in the morning and I like the emptiness.

Multiple tense and sentence structure problems: 'I don't have any problem' is acceptable but 'it's not a problem' is more natural. 'Even I don't uh. Something in the morning' is ungrammatical; replace with 'I don't do much in the morning'. 'I like empty' needs a noun: 'the emptiness' or 'having time to myself'. Suggestion: Use complete clauses, avoid fragments, and choose correct noun forms after 'like'. Example: 'I don't do much in the morning and I like the emptiness.'

× Well, the most difference is. Household number. I mean, nowadays I live alone so I don't have any family in my house, so I usually spend time alone.

✓ Well, the biggest difference is the number of people in the household. I mean, nowadays I live alone so I don't have any family in my house, and I usually spend time alone.

Fragments and incorrect noun phrase: 'the most difference is.' is incomplete and 'Household number' is unnatural. Use 'the biggest difference is the number of people in the household.' Also use 'and' instead of repeating 'so' for smoother flow. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments; form full noun phrases and connect ideas with conjunctions. Example: 'The biggest difference is the number of people in the household.'

× Well, it's really challenging question for me because I really want to wake up in the morning early but it is not easy. So I want to change my wake up time because I want to be a morning person.

✓ Well, it's a really challenging question for me because I really want to wake up early in the morning but it is not easy. So I want to change my wake-up time because I want to become a morning person.

Word order and noun formation issues: 'wake up in the morning early' should be 'wake up early in the morning'. 'wake up time' as a compound noun is better hyphenated as 'wake-up time'. 'Be a morning person' is acceptable but 'become a morning person' shows the change process. Suggestion: Use correct adverb placement ('early in the morning'), hyphenate compound nouns ('wake-up time'), and choose verbs that convey change ('become').