Language— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá đầy đủ nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ chưa chính xác, ví dụ như 'completely fluency' nên là 'complete fluency' hoặc 'fluently'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời hơi dài và có thể ngắn gọn hơn để tránh lặp lại. Bạn nên sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và chú ý cách phát âm tên bài thi IELTS đúng.

例: I speak Vietnamese fluently as it is my native language. Additionally, I have an intermediate level of English, which I am actively improving because I aim to score 8.5 in the IELTS exam. I believe mastering English will open many career opportunities for me.

提案: Bạn đã trả lời đúng trọng tâm câu hỏi nhưng câu cuối 'anyone can make projects' không rõ nghĩa và có thể gây hiểu nhầm. Bạn nên dùng từ phù hợp hơn để diễn đạt ý 'bất cứ ai cũng có thể thành công' hoặc 'có thể học được'. Ngoài ra, bạn nên sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ.

例: Yes, learning a new language is definitely challenging because it requires consistent hard work and sometimes natural talent. However, I believe that with enough effort and the right mindset, anyone can succeed in learning a new language.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng bạn nên chú ý đến số nhiều của danh từ 'opportunity' thành 'opportunities' để chính xác hơn. Ngoài ra, bạn có thể thêm một vài chi tiết cụ thể hơn để câu trả lời phong phú và tự nhiên hơn.

例: Yes, I would love to learn other languages in the future, especially French and Spanish. Since they are widely spoken worldwide, knowing them would open up more global opportunities for me, such as traveling or working abroad.

提案: Bạn đã truyền đạt ý tốt nhưng có một số lỗi nhỏ về ngữ pháp và số nhiều, ví dụ 'futures' nên là 'future' và 'different background' nên là 'different backgrounds'. Bạn nên sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ.

例: Well, to be honest, English is not just a subject for me; it is a way to open up my future. I dream of working in international organizations like UNICEF, where I can support people from different backgrounds and make a real difference.

× I'm a Vietnamese speaker so I speak the language with completely fluency.

✓ I'm a Vietnamese speaker so I speak the language with complete fluency.

The word 'fluency' is an uncountable noun and should be modified by 'complete' instead of 'completely', which is an adverb. Using 'completely' before a noun is incorrect; the adjective 'complete' is appropriate here.

× In addition, I have intermediate level of English which I'm actively working to improve and my goal is to achieve an 8.5 ILS as I believe mastering in English will open up a wide range of career for me.

✓ In addition, I have an intermediate level of English which I'm actively working to improve and my goal is to achieve an 8.5 IELTS as I believe mastering English will open up a wide range of careers for me.

The phrase 'intermediate level' requires the indefinite article 'an' before it. Also, 'ILS' is likely a typo for 'IELTS'. The phrase 'mastering in English' is incorrect; it should be 'mastering English' without 'in'. Finally, 'a wide range of career' should be pluralized to 'careers' to match the quantifier 'a wide range of'.

× It requires a lot of hard work consistently, and maybe even a bit of natural talent.

✓ It requires a lot of consistent hard work, and maybe even a bit of natural talent.

The adverb 'consistently' is misplaced. It should modify 'hard work' as an adjective phrase 'consistent hard work' to improve sentence clarity and correctness.

× But I also believe that with enough effort and the right mindset, anyone can make projects.

✓ But I also believe that with enough effort and the right mindset, anyone can complete projects.

The verb 'make' is not typically used with 'projects'. The correct verb is 'complete' or 'carry out' when referring to projects. This improves the sentence's meaning and grammatical correctness.

× They are both widely spoken around the world and I think knowing them would open up more global opportunity for me.

✓ They are both widely spoken around the world and I think knowing them would open up more global opportunities for me.

The noun 'opportunity' should be pluralized to 'opportunities' to agree with the quantifier 'more', which indicates a plural noun.

× Well, to be honest, English isn't just a subject for me.

✓ Well, to be honest, English isn't just a subject to me.

The preposition 'for' is less appropriate here; 'to me' better expresses personal significance or meaning.

× This is a way to open up my futures and I dream of working in international organizations like UNICEF where I can support people from different background and make a real difference.

✓ This is a way to open up my future and I dream of working in international organizations like UNICEF where I can support people from different backgrounds and make a real difference.

The word 'futures' should be singular 'future' because it refers to the speaker's own future. Also, 'background' should be plural 'backgrounds' because it refers to multiple people from various backgrounds.