Language— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "Punjabi language"; just say "Punjabi." Also, you can add a linking phrase to make it smoother.

例: I mainly speak Punjabi, which is my native language. Besides that, I can also speak Hindi and English.

提案: Your answer is a bit long and has some grammatical errors. Try to use linking words like "because" and "therefore" properly, and avoid repetition. Also, be specific and clear in your explanation.

例: Yes, I think learning a new language is difficult because it involves a large vocabulary, different alphabets, and various pronunciations. Therefore, it requires a lot of practice, and many people struggle to learn it.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be more concise and natural. Use linking words like "because" and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, correct minor grammar mistakes.

例: Yes, I want to learn Japanese because my children enjoy watching anime, which are Japanese cartoons. Many of these shows are not available in English, so learning Japanese will help me understand them better.

提案: Your answer has good points but needs better structure and grammar. Use linking words like "because," "moreover," and "furthermore" correctly. Also, avoid vague phrases like "businesses and from foreign." Be specific and clear.

例: I want to learn English because it is an international language spoken in many countries. Moreover, many businesses operate in English, and it is essential for pursuing higher education abroad, such as a master's degree.

× Yes, I think it is quite hard to learn a new language because there are a vast vocabulary, alphabets and many pronunciations for different kind of languages which are very difficult to learn.

✓ Yes, I think it is quite hard to learn a new language because there is a vast vocabulary, alphabets and many pronunciations for different kinds of languages which are very difficult to learn.

The phrase 'there are a vast vocabulary' is incorrect because 'vocabulary' is singular and should be preceded by 'there is'. Also, 'different kind of languages' should be 'different kinds of languages' to match plural form. This correction ensures subject-verb agreement and proper pluralization.

× Apart from that to learn a new language a lot of practice is needed and people which due to which they are not able to learn a new language.

✓ Apart from that, to learn a new language a lot of practice is needed, and many people are not able to learn a new language because of this.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'People which due to which' is incorrect; 'people' should be followed by 'who' or rephrased. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness, using 'because of this' to explain the reason.

× Yes, I want to learn Japanese since my children are very interested in watching anime, which are basically the cartoons of Japan.

✓ Yes, I want to learn Japanese since my children are very interested in watching anime, which is basically the cartoons of Japan.

The word 'anime' is singular or uncountable, so the relative pronoun should be 'which is' instead of 'which are'. This correction ensures subject-verb agreement.

× I want to learn this language because I want to watch them and their natural language because many of them are not present in English or any other language.

✓ I want to learn this language because I want to watch them in their natural language, as many of them are not available in English or any other language.

The phrase 'watch them and their natural language' is unclear and incorrect. Adding 'in' before 'their natural language' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'not present in' is better expressed as 'not available in' for languages.

× Moreover, there are many businesses and from foreign who only speak English.

✓ Moreover, there are many businesses and foreigners who only speak English.

The phrase 'and from foreign' is incorrect. It should be 'and foreigners' to correctly refer to people from foreign countries. This correction fixes the noun usage and preposition error.

× Furthermore, it is very necessary to learn English if we want to learn a broader masters degree.

✓ Furthermore, it is very necessary to learn English if we want to pursue a broader master's degree.

The phrase 'learn a broader masters degree' is incorrect. One does not 'learn' a degree but 'pursue' or 'study' it. Also, 'masters degree' should be 'master's degree' with an apostrophe. This correction improves verb usage and noun form.