Language— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "I can speak multiple languages such as..." and then listing them. Instead, directly state the languages you speak and add a linking phrase to show your proficiency. Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I speak Punjabi, which is my mother tongue, as well as Hindi and English. Among these, I am particularly proficient in English and Hindi.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly natural, but it can be improved by using linking words and more precise vocabulary. For example, instead of 'definitely' at the start, you can use 'Yes, I think...' to sound more conversational. Also, 'regular practices' should be 'regular practice' as 'practice' is uncountable here.

例: Yes, I think learning a new language is quite challenging because it requires constant hard work and regular practice.

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm but can be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating 'different' twice in one sentence. Also, 'connect with the other parts of the universe' sounds exaggerated; instead, say 'connect with people from other parts of the world.' Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' effectively to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I would love to learn more languages because it is fascinating and allows me to explore various cultures from around the world, so I can connect with people from different regions.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be more fluent and natural. Avoid repeating 'the' twice. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, instead of 'used for the academic purposes,' say 'used for academic purposes.' Try to combine sentences to avoid choppiness.

例: Besides Punjabi and Hindi, which are my first and second languages, I learned English at school because it is widely spoken and used for academic purposes.

× learning a new language is bit challenging because it demands constant hard work and regular practices.

✓ learning a new language is a bit challenging because it demands constant hard work and regular practice.

The phrase 'bit challenging' is missing the article 'a' before 'bit'. Also, 'practices' should be singular 'practice' when referring to repeated activity in general. Use 'a bit' to indicate a small degree and 'practice' as an uncountable noun here.

× learning new language is quite fascinating and helps me to explore different cultures from different regions of the world.

✓ learning a new language is quite fascinating and helps me to explore different cultures from different regions of the world.

The phrase 'learning new language' is missing the article 'a' before 'new language'. 'Language' is singular and requires an article here to be grammatically correct.

× Besides Punjabi and Hindi which is my first and second language, English was the the language which I learned from my school.

✓ Besides Punjabi and Hindi, which are my first and second languages, English was the language which I learned at my school.

'Punjabi and Hindi' are two languages, so the verb should be plural 'are' and 'languages' plural. Also, 'the the' is a typo and should be 'the'. The preposition 'from my school' is better expressed as 'at my school' to indicate where the learning took place.