Language— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более естественным и грамматически правильным. Используйте связки для плавного перечисления языков и избегайте повторений. Например, можно сказать: "I can speak three languages. My mother tongue is Kazakh, then I speak Russian, and finally English."

例: I can speak three languages. My mother tongue is Kazakh, then I speak Russian, and finally English.

提案: Ответ должен быть более связным и грамматически правильным. Используйте связующие слова для объяснения причины трудности. Например: "For me, learning a new language is very difficult because I find it hard to remember many new words."

例: For me, learning a new language is very difficult because I find it hard to remember many new words.

提案: Ответ можно улучшить, сделав его более естественным и связным, используя правильные формы множественного числа и связки. Например: "Of course, I will learn Asian languages in the future. I prefer Korean, Chinese, and Japanese because I watch TV programs and social media about these languages, so I really want to learn them."

例: Of course, I will learn Asian languages in the future. I prefer Korean, Chinese, and Japanese because I watch TV programs and social media about these languages, so I really want to learn them.

提案: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и грамматически правильным. Используйте связки для логического изложения причин. Например: "I learn English because it gives me pleasure. I want to speak English fluently to communicate with others and to ask questions when I travel."

例: I learn English because it gives me pleasure. I want to speak English fluently to communicate with others and to ask questions when I travel.

× I can speak three language.

✓ I can speak three languages.

The noun 'language' should be plural 'languages' because it refers to more than one language. In English, countable nouns require plural form when the quantity is more than one.

× it's Kazakh language, second, it's Russian language and the third is the English language.

✓ it's Kazakh, second, it's Russian, and the third is English.

When naming languages, the word 'language' is often omitted after the language name. Also, 'Kazakh language' and 'Russian language' should be pluralized only if referring to multiple languages, but here they are singular names, so just the language names are sufficient.

× my brain isn't work that I, uh, that I could because, uh, more words I can't remember or I just, umm, I just can't remember.

✓ my brain doesn't work so that I can, uh, remember more words; I can't remember or I just, umm, I just can't remember.

The verb 'work' needs to be in the correct present tense form 'doesn't work' to agree with the singular subject 'brain'. Also, the sentence structure is corrected for clarity and proper modal verb usage.

× I will learn Asian language in the future.

✓ I will learn Asian languages in the future.

Since the student mentions multiple languages (Korean, Chinese, Japanese), the noun 'language' should be plural 'languages' to reflect more than one language.

× I prefer Korean, Chinese and Japanese language.

✓ I prefer Korean, Chinese, and Japanese languages.

When listing multiple languages, the noun 'language' should be plural 'languages' to indicate more than one language.

× I really like this language because I am watching TV programs or social medias about these languages

✓ I really like these languages because I watch TV programs or social media about them.

'This language' should be 'these languages' to match the plural form. Also, 'social medias' is incorrect; 'social media' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized.

× I really want to learn these languages.

✓ I really want to learn these languages.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× Learn English, it gives me pleasure.

✓ Learning English gives me pleasure.

The gerund form 'Learning' is needed to act as the subject of the sentence. The original sentence is a comma splice and incorrect in structure.

× I really want no English speak fluency and have communication with other peoples who can speak English or just when I'm when I'm traveling I I can ask question about people who can speak English and I'm just enjoying this part in my mind and I really want.

✓ I really want to speak English fluently and communicate with other people who can speak English. Also, when I'm traveling, I can ask questions to people who speak English, and I really enjoy this part in my mind.

The original sentence has multiple pronoun and article errors: 'no English speak fluency' should be 'to speak English fluently'; 'other peoples' should be 'other people'; 'ask question' should be 'ask questions'. The sentence is also run-on and needs to be split for clarity.