Language— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınızda dil bilgisi ve cümle yapısı hataları var. Daha doğal ve akıcı olmak için, cümlelerinizi basit ve net tutun. Ayrıca, gereksiz tekrarları ve anlamsız ifadeleri azaltmalısınız.

例: I can speak Turkish and English. Currently, I am a student learning French, so I am trying to improve my French skills.

提案: Cevabınızda çok fazla duraksama ve tekrar var, bu da akıcılığı düşürüyor. Daha net ve kısa cümleler kurarak, düşüncelerinizi daha etkili ifade edebilirsiniz. Ayrıca, neden zor olduğunu daha spesifik örneklerle açıklayın.

例: Yes, learning a new language is difficult because I have many responsibilities like work and daily life. Therefore, I need to spend extra time practicing to improve.

提案: Cümlenizde bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve anlamsal karışıklıklar var. Daha açık ve doğru cümleler kurmaya çalışın. Ayrıca, neden öğrenmek istediğinizi daha net ifade edin ve bağlaçlar kullanarak cümlenizi geliştirin.

例: In the future, I plan to learn French because I want to visit the French-speaking part of Switzerland. Therefore, I need to reach at least an intermediate level in French.

提案: Cevabınızda çok fazla duraksama ve tamamlanmamış cümleler var. Daha net ve tamamlanmış cümleler kurmaya odaklanın. Ayrıca, neden İngilizce öğrendiğinizi açık ve mantıklı bir şekilde ifade edin.

例: I learn English because it is the global language. I believe it is important to speak English confidently and correctly to succeed in today's world.

× I can speak Turkish and English language and but I'm I'm live a student in French, I double into speak French.

✓ I can speak Turkish and English, and I am a student learning French; I also want to speak French fluently.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'and but' together, which is redundant and confusing. Also, 'I'm live a student in French' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'I am a student learning French.' The phrase 'I double into speak French' is unclear and likely a misuse of words; it is corrected to 'I also want to speak French fluently.' To improve, avoid using contradictory conjunctions together and ensure verbs and phrases are used correctly.

× Yes, it is, uh, very difficult, uh, because, uh, you know, we have, uh, more responsibilities in this era, uh, about work issues, life issues, traffic issues and, uh, we have to, uh, we have to, we have to spend more time to.

✓ Yes, it is very difficult because we have more responsibilities nowadays, such as work, life, and traffic issues, and we have to spend more time on them.

The original sentence repeats 'we have to' unnecessarily and ends with an incomplete phrase 'spend more time to.' The modal verb 'have to' should be followed by the base form of the verb without 'to.' Also, the sentence is cluttered with filler words 'uh' which should be omitted for clarity. To improve, avoid repetition and ensure modal verbs are followed by correct verb forms.

× In the future I'm planning to learn French because I want to to go Switzerland in this French part and I need to learn this language, maybe intermediate or other low levels.

✓ In the future, I am planning to learn French because I want to go to the French-speaking part of Switzerland, and I need to learn the language, maybe to an intermediate or lower level.

The sentence has a repeated 'to' in 'want to to go' and misses the preposition 'to' before 'Switzerland.' Also, 'this French part' is vague; it is clearer to say 'the French-speaking part of Switzerland.' The phrase 'maybe intermediate or other low levels' is awkward; it is better to say 'maybe to an intermediate or lower level.' To improve, avoid repeated words, use correct prepositions, and clarify phrases.

× Because in our era, it's the global language, uh, you have to learn, uh, deeply, I think, uh, you have to speak, uh, confidently and properly, uh, if you want to, uh, be a good, uh, possession, uh, if, if you.

✓ Because in our era, English is the global language; you have to learn it deeply. I think you have to speak confidently and properly if you want to be successful.

The original sentence misuses 'possession' which is incorrect in this context; likely the intended word is 'professional' or 'successful.' Also, the sentence is fragmented and contains many filler words 'uh.' The phrase 'learn deeply' is acceptable but could be clearer as 'learn it deeply.' To improve, use appropriate vocabulary, avoid filler words, and complete sentences properly.