Language— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện phát âm, ngữ pháp và tính mạch lạc: (1) Nói rõ tên các ngôn ngữ mà bạn biết bằng phát âm chính xác (ví dụ: 'French', 'Vietnamese'). (2) Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và những cụm từ không rõ nghĩa (ví dụ: 'friends Chibala France', 'I can 6 French'). (3) Dùng một câu chủ đề ngắn rồi thêm 1-2 chi tiết hỗ trợ; giữ tổng số câu không quá 5. (4) Sử dụng từ nối khi liệt kê như 'and' hoặc 'also'.

例: I can speak Vietnamese and English, and I also know a little French. French is the most difficult for me because its pronunciation and grammar are different from Vietnamese.

提案: Tập trung vào câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sửa ngữ pháp và giảm tiếng 'umm': (1) Bắt đầu bằng một câu trả lời trực tiếp như 'Yes, it depends on the person.' (2) Tránh lỗi số ít/số nhiều ('a bilingual person' not 'a bilingual people'). (3) Thêm 1-2 lý do cụ thể với liên từ như 'because' hoặc 'for example'. (4) Giảm từ ngữ lặp, giữ lại tối đa 4 câu.

例: Yes, I think it depends on the person. For example, someone who already speaks two languages usually learns a third language more easily because they are familiar with grammar patterns and pronunciation differences.

提案: Trả lời trực tiếp, sửa cấu trúc câu và nêu ví dụ cụ thể: (1) Dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng như 'No, I probably won't.' (2) Sử dụng cấu trúc hợp lý: 'I don't currently need to learn another language.' (3) Thêm lý do rõ ràng và một ví dụ liên quan đến công việc. (4) Tránh lặp và các từ thừa như 'uh'.

例: No, I probably won't learn another language in the near future because my current job does not require it. For example, I work with local clients and rarely interact with international partners.

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp, tính chính xác và tính mạch lạc: (1) Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp như 'foreigners' và cấu trúc 'I English is now' -> 'English is now'. (2) Nói ngắn gọn: đưa ra một câu chủ đề rồi 1-2 lý do cụ thể. (3) Dùng ví dụ hợp lý về lợi ích như giao tiếp, công việc hoặc truy cập thông tin. (4) Tránh nói quá chung chung như 'cannot use the computer' — nêu cụ thể tính năng hoặc nền tảng.

例: I learn English because it helps me communicate with people from other countries and access more information online. For example, many websites and software are in English, so knowing it makes study and work easier.

× Well, I can speak Vietnamese, English and also a little bit of friends Chibala France which means I can 6 French and I think French might be the most difficult one.

✓ Well, I can speak Vietnamese and English, and I can speak a little French; I think French might be the most difficult one.

The sentence contains awkward and incorrect word choices (e.g., 'friends Chibala France', 'I can 6 French') and poor word order. Replace with concise adjectives/adverbs and correct noun phrases: 'a little French' is the correct expression. Also join clauses with proper punctuation.

× Well, I think it's really depending on umm on different people.

✓ Well, I think it really depends on different people.

The phrase 'it's really depending' uses the progressive incorrectly with 'depend'. Use the simple present 'depends' for general truths. 'On different people' is acceptable; no extra preposition needed.

× I mean if you are a bilingual people, you are a bilingual person, for example umm, you will have the sense of language, like you can connect with a new language easier.

✓ I mean, if you are bilingual, for example, you will have a sense for languages and you can learn a new language more easily.

Use 'bilingual' as an adjective, not 'a bilingual people' or repeated 'a bilingual person'. 'Sense of language' is better as 'a sense for languages'. Use comparative adverb 'more easily' rather than adjective 'easier' after 'can'.

× Umm by.

✓ (Remove as it is an incomplete fragment)

This fragment 'Umm by.' is incomplete and has no clear meaning; it should be removed or completed into a full sentence.

× Uh, actually, I don't have the need to learn language, uh, currently.

✓ Uh, actually, I don't have the need to learn a language at the moment.

English requires an article before 'need' when referring to 'a need' or use 'don't need to learn languages'. Also use 'a language' or plural 'languages'. 'Currently' can be replaced by the more natural phrase 'at the moment'.

× And I don't think I might want to learn new language in the future because I can't think of any reason that I might use that language in my career, for example.

✓ And I don't think I will want to learn a new language in the future because I can't think of any reason I would use that language in my career, for example.

Use consistent modal/future forms: 'I don't think I will want' is better than 'might want' after negation. Include an article 'a new language'. Use conditional 'would use' to express hypothetical future use.

× Well, I want to learn English because I want to understand what most foreigner people said and also I English is now is an essential, essential language.

✓ Well, I want to learn English because I want to understand what most foreigners say, and English is now an essential language.

Use plural noun 'foreigners' and present tense 'say' for general facts. Remove redundant 'I' before 'English' and duplicate 'is'. Use 'an essential language' with correct article.

× Without English I cannot use social media, for example, I cannot use the computer.

✓ Without English, I cannot use social media; for example, I cannot use some computer programs.

Comma splice corrected to semicolon; 'use the computer' is too general—if meaning specific software, say 'computer programs' or 'certain websites'. Also add comma after introductory clause.

× So I think it is important for me to learn English.

✓ So I think it is important for me to learn English.

This sentence is grammatically correct; left unchanged. It fits context and tense and needs no correction.