Language— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, with a direct topic sentence and supporting details. To improve, make it more concise and natural: avoid redundancy (e.g. "since it's a compulsory subject there" and "I have studied it continuously" convey similar ideas). Use one or two linking words and keep sentences varied in length. Also consider adding a brief comment on your proficiency level in English to give more specific information.

例: I can speak Chinese, which is my native language, and English. I was born in China and began learning English at primary school because it’s a compulsory subject, so I’ve been studying it continuously and am now at an upper-intermediate level.

提案: This is a strong answer: direct, coherent and supported by a concrete example. To raise it further, vary your vocabulary slightly (replace repeated words like "language" with synonyms when appropriate) and add a brief personal comment or a linking phrase to make the response more conversational.

例: Absolutely — learning a new tongue can be very challenging because you get used to your native sounds, grammar and vocabulary. For instance, moving from a language with simple grammar to one with complex verb tenses demands a lot of practice and time; I experienced this when I first studied English.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but sounds slightly abrupt and contains some grammar issues and repetition. Improve naturalness by using smoother linking words, correcting grammar (e.g. "I prefer to focus"), and adding a brief explanation or possibility to show openness (avoid an absolute refusal). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Not at the moment. I already speak Chinese and English, and since English is widely used for travel and study I’m focusing on improving it. However, I might consider learning another language later if it becomes useful for my career.

提案: The answer gives basic reasons but is repetitive and contains awkward phrasing ("so it's really needy"). Improve by using concise, natural language, correcting grammar, and giving specific goals (e.g. "for academic study, to pass entrance exams, and to communicate while traveling"). Use linking words to connect reasons logically.

例: I began learning English in primary school because it’s compulsory in China, and I’ve continued ever since. I’m improving my English to prepare for university and a one‑year postgraduate program, and also so I can communicate confidently when I travel abroad.

× I can speak Chinese and English.

✓ I can speak Chinese and English.

No grammatical error; sentence is correct. Included only for completeness.

× Chinese is my native language because I was born in China and I started learning English at primary school since it's a compulsory subject there, so I have studied it continuously.

✓ Chinese is my native language because I was born in China, and I started learning English at primary school since it is a compulsory subject there, so I have studied it continuously.

Minor punctuation and register: replace contraction "it's" with "it is" for formality and add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses. The grammar falls under sentence structure issues (26) because the clause linking and punctuation affect clarity.

× Absolutely. It can be really challenging because when you grow up with one language, you become used to its sounds, grammar and vocabulary, so learning a new system feels unfamiliar.

✓ Absolutely. It can be really challenging because when you grow up with one language, you become used to its sounds, grammar, and vocabulary, so learning a new system feels unfamiliar.

No tense errors, but missing comma in a list and clarity: add a comma before 'and' in a list (Oxford comma) to improve clarity. Classified under present participle issues (10) only because 'learning' is used correctly; main issue is punctuation and list clarity.

× For example, switching from a language with simple grammar to one with complex verb tenses requires a lot of practice and time.

✓ For example, switching from a language with simple grammar to one with complex verb tenses requires a lot of practice and time.

Sentence is grammatically correct; included to show no change needed.

× Actually no.

✓ Actually, no.

Add a comma after 'Actually' for natural pause. Classified as modal/response phrasing (4) though not a modal verb error; it's a punctuation/intonation issue.

× I already speak Chinese and English and English is a global language that I can use almost anywhere.

✓ I already speak Chinese and English, and English is a global language that I can use almost anywhere.

Add a comma before 'and' to separate independent clauses. This is a sentence structure issue (26).

× So for travel and studying abroad that is enough for me.

✓ So, for travel and studying abroad, that is enough for me.

Add commas to set off the introductory 'So' and the phrase 'for travel and studying abroad' for clarity. This is sentence structure (26).

× Besides, I prefer focus on improving my English and professional skills rather than learning other language right now.

✓ Besides, I prefer to focus on improving my English and professional skills rather than learning another language right now.

Problems: after 'prefer' use the infinitive 'to focus' or gerund 'focusing' (preferred: 'to focus' here). Also 'other language' should be 'another language' (article/word choice). This falls under verb + -ing form (8) for the 'prefer' construction and article use (22). Use 'to focus' and 'another' to be correct.

× I started learning English in primary school because it's a compulsory subject in China and I've continued studying it since then.

✓ I started learning English in primary school because it is a compulsory subject in China, and I have continued studying it since then.

Replace contraction 'it's' with 'it is' for formality and add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses. Classified as sentence structure (26) and article/word choice minor.

× I want to improve my English for university.

✓ I want to improve my English for university.

Sentence is correct as is; included for completeness.

× What's more, I plan to take a one year postgraduate program and for traveling abroad, so it's really needy.

✓ What's more, I plan to take a one-year postgraduate program and travel abroad, so it is really necessary.

Multiple issues: 'one year' as a compound adjective should be hyphenated 'one-year' (adjective order/formation, 18), 'postgraduate program' is fine, but 'and for traveling abroad' is awkward — use parallel structure 'and travel abroad'. The final phrase 'so it's really needy' is incorrect word choice; 'needy' describes people, not things — use 'necessary' or 'important'. This falls under incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs (13) and sentence structure (26).