Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more natural. Use plural form 'family members' and say 'cut my birthday cake'. Also, avoid redundancy and add linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I usually spend my birthday with my friends and family members. Additionally, I cut my birthday cake, which is always a unique and memorable experience for me.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and lacks clarity. Use past tense correctly and structure your sentences properly. Also, explain the game briefly to add specific details and use linking words for coherence.

例: When I was young, I invited all my friends and family members to celebrate together. We enjoyed playing games like Karaman Bludau, which is a traditional game that involves teamwork and fun.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using more natural expressions and clearer sentence structure. Replace 'necessary' with 'important' and clarify the reason with linking words.

例: Yes, I think it is important to celebrate my birthday because it allows me to create memorable moments by spending quality time with my friends.

提案: Your answer is honest but too brief and does not fully address the question. Try to give a general opinion or guess, and use linking words to expand your answer even if you are unsure.

例: I am not sure whose birthday is considered the most important in China, but I believe that birthdays of close family members, like parents, are usually celebrated with great importance.

× I like to spend time with my friends and family member and I also cut my cake of birthday and it is very unique experience for me.

✓ I like to spend time with my friends and family members and I also cut my birthday cake and it is a very unique experience for me.

The word 'family member' should be plural 'family members' because it refers to more than one person. 'Cake of birthday' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'birthday cake'. Also, 'very unique' is incorrect because 'unique' means one of a kind, so 'very' is unnecessary; however, it is commonly used informally. Here, adding 'a' before 'very unique experience' is necessary as 'experience' is a countable noun.

× When I was young by invite all my friends and family members and we enjoy a lot to get together and also play games like Karaman Bludau.

✓ When I was young, I invited all my friends and family members and we enjoyed getting together a lot and also played games like Karaman Bludau.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb in the first clause ('by invite' is incorrect). It should be 'I invited'. The verb tense should be past tense ('invited', 'enjoyed', 'played') to match 'When I was young'. Also, 'enjoy a lot to get together' is incorrect; it should be 'enjoyed getting together a lot'.

× When I was young by invite all my friends and family members and we enjoy a lot to get together and also play games like Karaman Bludau.

✓ When I was young, I invited all my friends and family members and we enjoyed getting together a lot and also played games like Karaman Bludau.

The phrase 'enjoy a lot to get together' is incorrect. After 'enjoy', the verb should be in the '-ing' form, so 'getting together' is correct.

× Yes, it is very necessary for me to celebrate my birthday because it is a memorable thing which I spend a lot of time with my friends.

✓ Yes, it is very necessary for me to celebrate my birthday because it is a memorable occasion when I spend a lot of time with my friends.

The phrase 'which I spend a lot of time with my friends' is incorrect. 'Which' should be replaced with 'when' to refer to the time of celebration. Also, 'thing' is vague; 'occasion' is more appropriate here.

× I don't know about that, but in future I will definitely research about it.

✓ I don't know about that, but in the future I will definitely research it.

The phrase 'in future' should be 'in the future' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'research about it' is incorrect; 'research' is a transitive verb and does not require 'about'.