Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly stating your activities and using correct grammar. Avoid filler words like 'Uh'.

例: On my birthday, I usually buy myself a gift and enjoy delicious food with my friends and family.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains many grammatical mistakes. Please try to structure your answer clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details. Use correct verb forms and vocabulary, and avoid unclear phrases.

例: When I was young, I often gave presents to my parents and ate foods like cakes and chicken with my family.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I think celebrating my birthday is important because I usually don't buy things for myself during the year, so I treat myself on that day.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Please provide a full sentence with a clear topic and supporting details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid sentence fragments.

例: In China, I believe that celebrating parents' birthdays is very important because Chinese culture values respecting elders.

× I usually buy some gift for me and it's some delicious food with my friends and family on my birthday.

✓ I usually buy some gifts for myself and eat some delicious food with my friends and family on my birthday.

The pronoun 'me' is incorrect here; the reflexive pronoun 'myself' should be used when the subject and object are the same person. Also, 'some gift' should be plural 'some gifts' to match the context, and the verb 'eat' is needed to correctly describe the action with food.

× I usually buy some gift for me and it's some delicious food with my friends and family on my birthday.

✓ I usually buy some gifts for myself and eat some delicious food with my friends and family on my birthday.

The noun 'gift' should be plural 'gifts' because 'some' indicates more than one item.

× When I was a young I often given.

✓ When I was young, I often gave gifts.

The phrase 'a young' is incorrect; 'young' is an adjective and does not need an article here. Also, 'given' is the past participle and should be changed to the past tense 'gave' to match the sentence structure.

× When I was a young I often given.

✓ When I was young, I often gave gifts.

The verb 'given' is a past participle and should be replaced with the simple past tense 'gave' to correctly express past actions.

× In some presents for my parents and ate something there ish as foods such as cakes and checkins with my family.

✓ I gave some presents to my parents and ate foods such as cakes and chicken with my family.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'In some presents' is incorrect; it should be 'I gave some presents to my parents.' 'There ish as foods' is incorrect and should be 'foods such as.' Also, 'checkins' is a misspelling of 'chicken.' The sentence needs restructuring for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× In some presents for my parents and ate something there ish as foods such as cakes and checkins with my family.

✓ I gave some presents to my parents and ate foods such as cakes and chicken with my family.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used; 'gave some presents to my parents' is the correct form.

× Yes, it is important for me to celebrate my birthday because I don't buy something for me in their real life so.

✓ Yes, it is important for me to celebrate my birthday because I don't usually buy things for myself in real life.

The pronoun 'me' should be the reflexive 'myself' when the subject and object are the same. Also, 'something' is better replaced with the plural 'things' to indicate general items, and 'their' is incorrect here and should be omitted.

× Yes, it is important for me to celebrate my birthday because I don't buy something for me in their real life so.

✓ Yes, it is important for me to celebrate my birthday because I don't usually buy things for myself in real life.

The verb phrase 'don't buy' is correct in present tense, but adding 'usually' clarifies habitual action. Also, 'their' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context.

× In my birthday I often buy something once once too.

✓ On my birthday, I often buy something for myself as well.

The preposition 'in' should be 'on' when referring to days or dates. The phrase 'once once' is unclear and likely a repetition error; it should be removed or replaced with 'as well' to indicate addition.

× In my birthday I often buy something once once too.

✓ On my birthday, I often buy something for myself as well.

The correct preposition for dates is 'on' not 'in.' Also, 'for myself' clarifies the object of the action.

× I think in China up parents birthday is very important for us.

✓ I think in China, parents' birthdays are very important to us.

The phrase 'up parents birthday' is incorrect. It should be 'parents' birthdays' to show possession and plural form. Also, the sentence needs commas for clarity.

× I think in China up parents birthday is very important for us.

✓ I think in China, parents' birthdays are very important to us.

The noun 'birthday' should be plural 'birthdays' because it refers to multiple parents.

× Because I think Chinese people. It is important for Chinese people to respect their.

✓ Because I think it is important for Chinese people to respect their parents.

The sentence is fragmented and missing the object after 'their.' Adding 'parents' completes the thought and corrects the pronoun usage.