Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯，句子结构混乱，表达不完整。建议练习完整句子表达，避免断句，使用连接词使回答更自然流畅。

例: Before I came to Canada, I usually spent my birthday with my mom to thank her for bringing me into the world, and we had a small celebration together. Now that I am here, I celebrate differently.

提案: 回答基本清楚，但有语法错误和用词不当，如'invented'应为'invited'。建议注意动词时态和词汇准确性。

例: When I was a child, my parents would buy me a big birthday cake. I invited my good friends to my house to sing the birthday song, blow out the candles, and eat cake.

提案: 回答不够完整，句子不连贯，表达含糊。建议使用完整句子，清晰表达原因，并使用连接词。

例: Yes, I think it is important to celebrate my birthday. In the past, someone would take me to the park to play, and now it is also a special day to thank my mom.

提案: 回答断断续续，缺少连贯性。建议用完整句子表达观点，使用连接词使内容更流畅。

例: My parents' birthdays are the most important to me. So every year, I try to organize a family party and give them meaningful gifts to thank them for raising me.

× Before I came to Canada, I. Usually spend my birthday with my mom to thank her bring me into the world and we. Or the. Have a small celebration. Together. And now I'll be here.

✓ Before I came to Canada, I usually spent my birthday with my mom to thank her for bringing me into the world and we had a small celebration together. And now I'll be here.

句子中描述过去的习惯动作，动词时态应使用过去式。'Usually spend'应改为'usually spent'，'thank her bring'应改为'thank her for bringing'，'we have'应改为'we had'。此外，缺少介词'for'，动词'bring'应使用动名词形式。

× Before I came to Canada, I. Usually spend my birthday with my mom to thank her bring me into the world and we. Or the. Have a small celebration. Together. And now I'll be here.

✓ Before I came to Canada, I usually spent my birthday with my mom to thank her for bringing me into the world and we had a small celebration together. And now I'll be here.

动词'thank'后面应接介词'for'，表示感谢的原因。缺少'for'导致表达不完整。

× I invented my good friends to my place to sing birthday song, blow candles and eat cake.

✓ I invited my good friends to my place to sing birthday songs, blow out candles and eat cake.

动词'invented'用错，应为'invited'表示邀请。'birthday song'应为复数形式'birthday songs'，因为通常唱多首歌。'blow candles'应为'blow out candles'，表示吹灭蜡烛。

× I invented my good friends to my place to sing birthday song, blow candles and eat cake.

✓ I invited my good friends to my place to sing birthday songs, blow out candles and eat cake.

动词'invite'后应接介词'to'表示邀请到某地，使用正确。

× Yes, because in the past someone or take me to the park. To play on my birthday and now it's also important because it's a day to thank my mom.

✓ Yes, because in the past someone would take me to the park to play on my birthday, and now it's also important because it's a day to thank my mom.

句中'someone or take me'结构不正确，应为'someone would take me'表示过去习惯。

× Yes, because in the past someone or take me to the park. To play on my birthday and now it's also important because it's a day to thank my mom.

✓ Yes, because in the past someone would take me to the park to play on my birthday, and now it's also important because it's a day to thank my mom.

句子断裂，缺少连词和完整结构，需合并为完整句子。

× My parents birthdays are the most. Important to me.

✓ My parents' birthdays are the most important to me.

'parents'是复数所有格，需加撇号表示所有关系，'birthdays'应为复数形式。

× So every year I try to organize a. Family party and give them. Meaningful gifts. Just think just to thank them to raising me.

✓ So every year I try to organize a family party and give them meaningful gifts just to thank them for raising me.

句子断裂，缺少连贯性，'just think just to thank them to raising me'表达不清，应改为'just to thank them for raising me'。