Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более связным и естественным. Избегайте пауз и неясных выражений, используйте связующие слова для логичности. Также старайтесь формулировать предложения грамматически правильно и избегать повторов.

例: I usually spend my birthday with friends and family because it's a special family celebration. Being with them makes me feel excited and very happy.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткие выражения. Следует использовать правильные времена и более точные слова. Также стоит использовать связующие слова для улучшения связности ответа.

例: When I was young, my parents planned my birthday. On that day, I didn't go to school. I stayed at home and received presents like flowers and cake in the morning. In the evening, we had a family dinner, and I got many gifts.

提案: Ответ нечеткий и содержит ошибки в структуре и словоупотреблении. Следует строить предложения более грамотно и использовать связующие слова для логичности. Также стоит конкретизировать мысли.

例: I think it is important for everyone to celebrate their birthday because it is the only special day in the year that belongs to you. On this day, you can do many things that you love.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткие выражения. Следует использовать правильный порядок слов и более точные формулировки. Также стоит добавить связующие слова для плавности речи.

例: In my opinion, in China, the most important birthdays to celebrate are those of the father and mother because parents are considered more important than children.

× I usually spend time with my friends and family on my birthday because it's really family celebration, uh, I think.

✓ I usually spend time with my friends and family on my birthday because it's really a family celebration, uh, I think.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'family celebration'. In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article. Adding 'a' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× When you will be your family, you can. Be excited and really in. Happy.

✓ When you are with your family, you can be excited and really happy.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and unnecessary punctuation. 'When you will be your family' is incorrect; it should be 'When you are with your family'. Also, 'can. Be excited and really in. Happy.' is fragmented and should be combined into a single coherent sentence.

× When I was young, my parents plans my birthday.

✓ When I was young, my parents planned my birthday.

The verb 'plans' is in the present tense, but the sentence refers to a past event. The correct past tense form 'planned' should be used to maintain tense consistency.

× In this day, I never go to school.

✓ On that day, I never went to school.

The phrase 'In this day' is incorrect; 'On that day' is appropriate for past events. Also, 'never go' should be in past tense 'never went' to match the past context.

× Uh, I stay at home and in the morning I have my presence.

✓ Uh, I stayed at home and in the morning I had my presents.

The verbs 'stay' and 'have' should be in past tense 'stayed' and 'had' to match the past time frame. Also, 'presence' is incorrect; the correct word is 'presents'.

× It's always a flowers and cake and in the evening we have family dinner and I have a lot of presence.

✓ It's always flowers and cake, and in the evening we have a family dinner and I have a lot of presents.

The phrase 'a flowers' is incorrect because 'flowers' is plural and should not have the article 'a'. Also, 'presence' should be 'presents' to mean gifts.

× I have a lot of presence.

✓ I have a lot of presents.

The word 'presence' means existence or attendance, which is incorrect here. The correct word is 'presents', meaning gifts, which is plural and fits the context.

× I think forever person it is important to celebrate birthdays because only one day in a year you have only yours holiday.

✓ I think for every person it is important to celebrate birthdays because there is only one day in a year that is your holiday.

'Forever person' is incorrect; it should be 'for every person'. Also, 'you have only yours holiday' is incorrect; it should be 'there is only one day in a year that is your holiday' to clarify meaning and correct pronoun use.

× It's amazing in this day you need to. Do a lot of things that you love.

✓ It's amazing; on this day, you need to do a lot of things that you love.

The original sentence is fragmented and has incorrect punctuation. Combining the parts into one sentence with proper punctuation improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× In my opinion, in China, the most important celebration, it's like father, birthday or mother.

✓ In my opinion, in China, the most important celebrations are like father's birthday or mother's.

'Celebration' should be plural 'celebrations' to match the examples given. Also, possessive forms 'father's birthday' and 'mother's' are needed to indicate whose birthday is meant.

× Because in China parents is a more important than a child.

✓ Because in China parents are more important than children.

The subject 'parents' is plural and requires the plural verb 'are'. Also, 'a more important' is incorrect; it should be 'more important'. 'A child' should be plural 'children' to match 'parents'.