Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了主要意思，但有语法错误和重复表达。建议注意冠词的使用（如"on my birthday"），避免重复（"celebrate it with me"和"celebrate my birthday"重复），并简化句子结构，使表达更自然流畅。

例: On my birthday, I usually invite some close friends to celebrate together and book a table at my favorite restaurant.

提案: 回答内容较完整，但时态使用不准确（"prepare"应为过去式"prepared"），且句子连接略显生硬。建议注意时态一致，使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: When I was a child, my parents threw a birthday party for me and prepared a delicious cake. They also invited some of my friends and classmates to celebrate this special day, which I really appreciated.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和词汇使用不当（如"remind"应为"reminds"，"graduation"应为"gratitude"，"bought me"应为"gave birth to me"，"grow me up"应为"raised me"）。建议加强词汇准确性和语法正确性，表达更清晰。

例: Yes, it reminds me of the day I was born and helps me express my gratitude to my mother who gave birth to me and raised me. I really appreciate her because she is wonderful.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不自然（如"appreciate for"应为"appreciate"），且"president"一词在中国语境中不够准确，建议使用更合适的词汇如"leader"，并避免口语填充词"umm"。

例: I think the birthday of our national leader is the most important day for Chinese people to celebrate because he is a great leader of our era and we always appreciate his contributions.

× In my birthday, I usually invite some of my close friends to celebrate it with me and I also book my favorite restaurant to at at the place to celebrate my birthday.

✓ On my birthday, I usually invite some of my close friends to celebrate it with me and I also book my favorite restaurant to celebrate my birthday there.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to a specific day; 'on' should be used instead. Also, the phrase 'to at at the place' is incorrect and redundant; it should be simplified to 'to celebrate my birthday there' for clarity and correctness.

× When I was a child, my parents threw a birthday party for me and they prepare a delicious cake.

✓ When I was a child, my parents threw a birthday party for me and they prepared a delicious cake.

The verb 'prepare' should be in the past tense 'prepared' to match the past tense context of the sentence.

× They invited some of my friends and classmates to celebrate this special day for me.

✓ They invited some of my friends and classmates to celebrate this special day with me.

The preposition 'for' is incorrect here; 'with' is the correct preposition to indicate celebrating together.

× Yes, it remind me to remember the day I was born and keep appreciation and graduation for my mother who bought me and grow me up.

✓ Yes, it reminds me to remember the day I was born and keep appreciation and gratitude for my mother who brought me up and raised me.

The verb 'remind' should be in the third person singular form 'reminds' to agree with the subject 'it'. Also, 'bought me' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'brought me up' or 'raised me'. 'Graduation' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'gratitude'.

× I really appreciate her, she's so great.

✓ I really appreciate her; she's so great.

A semicolon or period is needed to separate the two independent clauses for correct sentence structure.

× I think umm, the birthday of my president is the most important and significant day to celebrate for Chinese people because they are the great leader of our new age and we always appreciate for his contribution.

✓ I think, umm, the birthday of my president is the most important and significant day to celebrate for Chinese people because he is the great leader of our new age and we always appreciate his contribution.

The preposition 'for' after 'appreciate' is incorrect; 'appreciate' is a transitive verb and does not require a preposition before its object. Also, 'they are' should be 'he is' to agree with the singular subject 'my president'.