Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时句子结构不够清晰，表达略显冗长且有语法错误。建议简化句子结构，明确表达主要信息，并使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: On my birthday, I usually have a simple celebration with a few friends and family. We enjoy dinner together and share a small birthday cake. This makes me feel very happy and content.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整，句子不连贯。建议使用完整句子，清晰描述过去的经历，并使用连接词使内容连贯。

例: When I was young, my family held a small party for me. They invited my classmates to have dinner, and we shared a birthday cake together. Spending time with them made me feel very happy.

提案: 回答表达了观点，但句子较长且缺少适当的连接词。建议分句表达观点和理由，使用连接词使表达更自然。

例: I think it is very important to celebrate my birthday because it makes me feel special. Also, I enjoy inviting my friends to my home to have dinner and share delicious cake.

提案: 回答偏离了问题主题，且表达不够清晰。建议直接回答问题，明确指出哪个人的生日最重要，并提供具体理由。

例: In China, I think the most important birthday to celebrate is that of our elders, like parents or grandparents, because they are respected and loved. Celebrating their birthdays shows our gratitude and respect.

× Well, my birthday is going to be very normal, just a few friends and my families hang out for a dinner with a small birthday cake I think is enough and I feel very delightful.

✓ Well, my birthday is going to be very normal, just a few friends and my family hang out for a dinner with a small birthday cake. I think it is enough and I feel very delighted.

“families”应为单数“family”，因为指的是自己的家庭。句子中“delightful”应改为“delighted”，因为表达的是人的感受。

× Where was y'all during my birthday My my families held a small celebrity for me.

✓ Where were y'all during my birthday? My family held a small celebration for me.

“was”应改为“were”，因为“y'all”是复数。 “families”应为单数“family”。“celebrity”应为“celebration”，意思是庆祝活动。

× They invited my classmates to have a dinner and we share a birthday cake together.

✓ They invited my classmates to have dinner and we shared a birthday cake together.

“a dinner”通常不加冠词，直接用“have dinner”。“share”应改为过去式“shared”，因为描述过去的事情。

× The time spent with them make me feel.

✓ The time spent with them made me feel happy.

“make”应改为过去式“made”，因为描述过去的感受。句子不完整，需补充感受内容。

× Well for me I think it's very important to celebrate my birthday because on my birthday I will feel very special and I also enjoy inviting my friends to my home and have a dinner as well as share delicious cake.

✓ Well, for me, I think it's very important to celebrate my birthday because on my birthday I feel very special and I also enjoy inviting my friends to my home to have dinner as well as share delicious cake.

“will feel”改为一般现在时“feel”，因为表达习惯和常态。 “have a dinner”应为“have dinner”，不加冠词。

× Well, I think it is. The country itself is more important to celebrate.

✓ Well, I think it is. The country itself is more important to celebrate.

此句无明显语法错误，但“it is”后应明确指代，建议补充内容使句子完整。

× In China, on National Day, we have the longest holiday in a year for seven years.

✓ In China, on National Day, we have the longest holiday of the year for seven days.

“in a year for seven years”表达不清，应为“of the year for seven days”，表示一年中最长的七天假期。

× For seven days, we just plan to travel and cheer for our country.

✓ For seven days, we just plan to travel and cheer for our country.

此句语法正确，无需修改。