Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer ga chotto fukuzatsu de, bunpou to eigo no shizen-sa ni mondai ga arimasu. Motto seikaku ni, junsoku ni kotaeru koto ga taisetsu desu. Tatoeba, 'I usually celebrate my birthday with my family. My parents give me a cake, and we eat it together. I also receive presents from them.' to iu fuu ni, motto rikai shi yasui kotoba wo tsukatte kudasai.

例: I usually celebrate my birthday with my family. My parents give me a cake, and we eat it together. I also receive presents from them.

提案: Kotae wa rikai dekimasu ga, bunpou to eigo no shizen-sa wo takameru hitsuyou ga arimasu. Tatoeba, 'When I was young, my parents set up a birthday table for dinner. My mom cooked my favorite food, and we ate cake after dinner.' to iu fuu ni, junsoku de wakariyasui kotoba wo tsukatte kudasai.

例: When I was young, my parents set up a birthday table for dinner. My mom cooked my favorite food, and we ate cake after dinner.

提案: Kotae wa sukoshi fukuzatsu de, imi ga wakari nikui tokoro ga arimasu. Motto meikaku ni setsumei shite, rikai shi yasui kotoba wo tsukatte kudasai. Tatoeba, 'Yes, I think celebrating my birthday is important because it happens only once a year. It helps me remember my age and spend time with my parents. For teenagers, it is more important than for others.' to iu fuu ni kotaete kudasai.

例: Yes, I think celebrating my birthday is important because it happens only once a year. It helps me remember my age and spend time with my parents. For teenagers, it is more important than for others.

提案: Kotae wa fumei de, shizen de rikai shi yasui eigo de kotaeru hitsuyou ga arimasu. Tatoeba, 'I'm not sure about birthdays in China, but I know that Chinese New Year is very important. In families, I think the father's birthday is important to celebrate.' to iu fuu ni, motto meikaku ni setsumei shite kudasai.

例: I'm not sure about birthdays in China, but I know that Chinese New Year is very important. In families, I think the father's birthday is important to celebrate.

× I usually celebrate my birthday in on my birthday and maybe my parents gave me some cakes and then ate with my family.

✓ I usually celebrate my birthday on my birthday, and maybe my parents give me some cakes and then eat with my family.

The phrase 'in on my birthday' contains an incorrect preposition; 'on' is the correct preposition to use with specific days. Also, the verb tense should be consistent in present tense to match 'usually'.

× I usually celebrate my birthday in on my birthday and maybe my parents gave me some cakes and then ate with my family.

✓ I usually celebrate my birthday on my birthday, and maybe my parents give me some cakes and then eat with my family.

The verbs 'gave' and 'ate' are in past tense, but the sentence describes a habitual action, so present tense 'give' and 'eat' should be used.

× I always get my new uh present for my family.

✓ I always get a new present from my family.

The phrase 'my new uh present for my family' is incorrect; it should be 'a new present from my family' to indicate the source of the gift.

× Uh, maybe My parents set up my birthday table for dinner and my mom cooks my favorite food for my birthday and eat some cakes after dinner.

✓ Maybe my parents set up my birthday table for dinner, and my mom cooks my favorite food for my birthday and eats some cakes after dinner.

The pronoun 'My' should be lowercase 'my'. Also, the verb 'eat' should be 'eats' to agree with the singular subject 'my mom'.

× Uh, maybe My parents set up my birthday table for dinner and my mom cooks my favorite food for my birthday and eat some cakes after dinner.

✓ Maybe my parents set up my birthday table for dinner, and my mom cooks my favorite food for my birthday and eats some cakes after dinner.

The verb 'eat' should be 'eats' to agree with the third person singular subject 'my mom'.

× Yes, I think so because celebrating my birthday is the big event, uh, once a year and my parents won't stay and I can know my ages and for teenagers it's important than others.

✓ Yes, I think so because celebrating my birthday is a big event once a year, and my parents won't stay, and I can know my age. For teenagers, it's more important than for others.

The phrase 'the big event' should be 'a big event' as it is not a specific event. 'My ages' is incorrect; 'my age' is correct. Also, 'important than others' should be 'more important than for others' to make a proper comparison.

× Actually, I'm not sure about China maybe celebrating China New Year.

✓ Actually, I'm not sure about China; maybe celebrating Chinese New Year.

The phrase 'China New Year' is incorrect; the correct term is 'Chinese New Year'. Also, a semicolon or period is needed to separate the two ideas.

× It is for China's king, for China in China's most important person.

✓ It is for China's king, the most important person in China.

The phrase 'for China in China's most important person' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'the most important person in China'.

× Uh, in family. I think the father is.

✓ In a family, I think the father is the most important.

The original sentence is fragmented and incomplete. It should be combined into a complete sentence with proper structure.