Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Votre réponse est claire mais pourrait être améliorée en utilisant des mots plus précis et en évitant les erreurs grammaticales, par exemple en disant "these types of games" au lieu de "these type of games". Essayez aussi d'ajouter une phrase supplémentaire pour expliquer pourquoi vous aimez ces activités.

例: On my birthday, I usually enjoy indoor activities like escape rooms and laser tag because they challenge my problem-solving skills and are fun to play with friends.

提案: Votre réponse contient une petite erreur grammaticale "I it was" et manque de fluidité. En français marocain, je vous conseille de structurer votre réponse avec une phrase principale claire suivie d'une explication. Utilisez des mots de liaison pour améliorer la cohérence.

例: When I was young, I didn't celebrate my birthday much because my family didn't have the tradition of parties. Instead, my parents usually gave me money as a gift.

提案: Votre réponse est bien structurée mais pourrait être améliorée en utilisant des expressions plus naturelles et en corrigeant la phrase "on all occasion" qui devrait être "on all occasions". En français marocain, je vous suggère d'utiliser des connecteurs pour rendre votre discours plus fluide.

例: I don't find it very important to celebrate my birthday specifically because I believe spending quality time with friends and family on any occasion is more meaningful.

提案: Votre réponse manque de précision et contient une erreur grammaticale "a national public figures" (singulier/pluriel). En français marocain, je vous conseille d'élargir votre réponse en expliquant pourquoi cette personne est importante et d'utiliser un vocabulaire plus approprié.

例: In China, I think the most important birthday to celebrate is that of the president because he represents the nation and plays a key role in the country's leadership.

× During my birthday I usually do a lot of indoor activities such as escape games and laser quests because I really enjoy these type of games.

✓ During my birthday I usually do a lot of indoor activities such as escape games and laser quests because I really enjoy these types of games.

The phrase 'these type of games' is incorrect because 'type' is singular while 'these' is plural. The correct form is 'these types of games' to match the plural demonstrative pronoun with the plural noun 'types'.

× When I was young, I mainly did nothing for my birthday because my parents usually gave me some money. To be honest, I it was not really our tradition to have parties and do activities.

✓ When I was young, I mainly did nothing for my birthday because my parents usually gave me some money. To be honest, it was not really our tradition to have parties and do activities.

The phrase 'I it was not really our tradition' contains an unnecessary pronoun 'I'. Removing 'I' corrects the sentence structure and maintains proper past tense usage.

× I believe the most important birthday to celebrate in China would be the president because he's really an important figure and a national public figures.

✓ I believe the most important birthday to celebrate in China would be the president because he's really an important figure and a national public figure.

The phrase 'a national public figures' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'figures'. Changing 'figures' to singular 'figure' matches the singular article and subject.