Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有些重复和语法错误，表达不够自然。建议简洁明了地描述生日活动，避免重复，并使用正确的时态和介词。

例: On my birthday, I usually spend time with my family. We have dinner together and enjoy chatting, which makes the day special for me.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整，缺少具体细节。建议用完整句子表达过去的经历，并具体描述感受和活动。

例: When I was young, I celebrated my birthday with my family by eating cake together. I felt very happy because everyone was around me, which made the day memorable.

提案: 回答表达不清晰，语法和逻辑混乱。建议明确表达观点，使用连贯的句子，并解释原因。

例: Nowadays, I don't think celebrating my birthday is very important because it feels like a normal day. However, I still appreciate the gifts and the attention from my loved ones.

提案: 回答不完整且重复，缺少连贯性。建议清楚表达观点，避免重复，并用具体理由支持。

例: In China, I think celebrating parents' birthdays is the most important because they deserve our respect and love for everything they have done for us.

× just spending time accompanying by each other so nothing fancy.

✓ just spend time accompanying each other, so nothing fancy.

这里应使用动词原形或不定式形式，因为前面是助动词或情态动词的省略，不能直接用动名词形式。

× go to it's dinner together

✓ go to dinner together

“go to dinner”是固定搭配，不能加“it's”，且“it's”用法错误。

× I used to spend time with my family and we ate birthday cake together.

✓ I used to spend time with my family and we ate birthday cake together.

此句时态正确，无需修改。

× It's a wonderful moment because I was so happy.

✓ It was a wonderful moment because I was so happy.

描述过去的时刻，应使用过去时态“was”，而非现在时态“is”。

× I was usually happy and I especially expect the most expected thing was.

✓ I was usually happy and I especially expected the most exciting thing.

“expect”应为过去式“expected”，且句子结构不完整，需补充完整表达。

× it's not because I don't want to, but because as the time passed, I think it's it's nothing.

✓ it's not because I don't want to, but because as time passed, I think it's nothing.

“as the time passed”中“the”多余，应去掉。

× But I still, but I still, you know, precious for what I gave.

✓ But I still, you know, cherish what I have.

“precious”用法错误，应使用动词“cherish”，且“what I gave”表达不清，应改为“what I have”。

× I would say that we parents birthday is the most important to celebrating because they are the most because they are the most.

✓ I would say that our parents' birthdays are the most important to celebrate because they are the most...

“parents birthday”应为复数所有格“parents' birthdays”，谓语动词也应与复数主语一致。

× the most important to celebrating

✓ the most important to celebrate

“to”后应接动词原形，不能用动名词形式。

× because they are the most because they are the most. The most respectful person I respect, I I love and I think they they.

✓ because they are the most respectful people I respect and love.

句子结构混乱，重复且不完整，应简化为完整通顺的句子。