Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有些重复和语法错误，建议简洁表达并注意时态和单复数。可以用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I usually celebrate my birthday with a small dinner with my family and friends. Sometimes, I prefer to spend it quietly alone. However, on my birthday, my loved ones always come together to wish me well.

提案: 回答中有语法和表达错误，如“in the moon”应为“in the morning”，建议直接回答问题并使用正确的时态和词汇。

例: When I was young, I usually spent my birthday afternoon with my friends. We often went to the shopping mall to find fun activities. In the evening, I would have dinner with my family at home.

提案: 回答中有拼写错误（unnewal应为unusual），建议用更自然的表达并说明原因。

例: I think celebrating my birthday is important because it marks a special day in my life. Every year, I like to have a big celebration to enjoy time with my family and friends.

提案: 回答不够清晰且有语法错误，建议直接表达观点并用连贯的句子说明理由。

例: In China, besides our own birthday, I think our mother's birthday is the most important to celebrate. This is because our mother gave us life, so we should show our gratitude and respect to her on her special day.

× Sometimes I always stay alone and have a quiet life, but in my birthday, all of my friends or families come together to make a wish for me.

✓ Sometimes I always stay alone and have a quiet life, but on my birthday, all of my friends or family come together to make a wish for me.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to a specific day; 'on' should be used instead. Also, 'families' should be singular 'family' when referring collectively to one's family members.

× in the moon or in the afternoon, I always hang out with my friends.

✓ in the morning or in the afternoon, I always hang out with my friends.

The phrase 'in the moon' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'in the morning' to indicate the time of day.

× We usually go to the shopping mall and to find something interesting to play, uh, in the dinner, I always stay with my family.

✓ We usually go to the shopping mall to find something interesting to play; at dinner, I always stay with my family.

The phrase 'in the dinner' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'at' when referring to meal times.

× I come back to home and we sit together to have a dinner.

✓ I come back home and we sit together to have dinner.

The phrase 'come back to home' is incorrect; 'come back home' is the correct expression. Also, 'have a dinner' should be 'have dinner' as 'dinner' is an uncountable noun here.

× The birthday is unnewal, so every year when in my birthday day, I always have a big celebration.

✓ The birthday is unique, so every year on my birthday, I always have a big celebration.

The word 'unnewal' is incorrect and likely a misspelling of 'unique'. Also, 'when in my birthday day' is awkward; 'on my birthday' is the correct phrase.

× I think in China expects my my own birthday, the next important day to celebrate.

✓ I think in China, except my own birthday, the next important day to celebrate is...

The phrase 'expects my my own birthday' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'except my own birthday' to express exclusion. Also, the sentence is incomplete and needs clarification.

× It's our mother's because if we didn't have mother, we can't go to the world.

✓ It's our mother's because if we didn't have a mother, we couldn't come into the world.

The phrase 'our mother's' is unclear; it should be 'our mother's birthday'. Also, 'we can't go to the world' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'we couldn't come into the world'. The modal verbs should be consistent in tense.

× So mother is we need to apologize our mother.

✓ So we need to apologize to our mother.

The sentence structure is incorrect. 'Mother is we need to apologize our mother' should be 'we need to apologize to our mother'. The preposition 'to' is necessary after 'apologize'.