Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và sắp xếp ý hợp lý hơn để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn. Ví dụ, hãy chú ý đến việc sử dụng thì và giới từ chính xác.

例: On my birthday, I usually have dinner with my family at my favorite restaurant. Sometimes, I also get together with my friends to enjoy delicious food. For me, it's not about having a big party but about feeling loved and grateful.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý đến ngữ pháp và tránh lặp từ không cần thiết. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, mạch lạc và có cấu trúc tốt hơn. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để kết nối ý và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

例: When I was a little girl, my parents surprised me with a birthday cake and heartfelt letters. I usually went out to dinner with my family and had a small party. It was not a big wild party.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và ý chưa rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để truyền đạt ý hiệu quả hơn. Hãy giải thích rõ lý do tại sao bạn nghĩ việc tổ chức sinh nhật quan trọng.

例: Yes, I think celebrating my birthday is important. It is not just about cake and presents, but a moment to reflect on my life and appreciate the people who care about me. Sometimes, it is also a way to treat myself.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý đến việc trả lời đúng câu hỏi và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và câu trúc rõ ràng hơn để câu trả lời tự nhiên và mạch lạc.

例: I think the most important birthday to celebrate in Vietnam is the first birthday. It is a traditional ceremony where family members gather to wish for the child's health and future, which is different from other traditional milestones.

× I just have dinner with my family and my favorite restaurant

✓ I just have dinner with my family at my favorite restaurant

The preposition 'at' is used to indicate a specific location, such as a restaurant. Using 'with' before 'my favorite restaurant' is incorrect because 'with' indicates accompaniment, not location.

× and sometime I get together with my friend to eat delicious food

✓ and sometimes I get together with my friends to eat delicious food

The word 'sometime' should be pluralized to 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. Also, 'friend' should be plural 'friends' to match the context of social gatherings.

× For me is not the big party but is full of love and grateful

✓ For me, it is not a big party but it is full of love and gratitude

The sentence lacks the subject 'it' before the verbs 'is'. Also, 'grateful' is an adjective and should be replaced with the noun 'gratitude' to fit the sentence structure.

× Is and and I usually go go out dinner with my family and grow a party

✓ My family and I usually go out to dinner and have a party

The original sentence has repeated words and incorrect word order. 'Is and and' and 'go go' are errors. Also, 'grow a party' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'have a party'.

× Is and and I usually go go out dinner with my family and grow a party

✓ My family and I usually go out to dinner and have a party

The pronoun 'I' should be paired with 'my family' as the subject. The original sentence misuses pronouns and has redundancy.

× It's a moment to reflect on your life and be reformed and be appreciated with the people who care about us

✓ It's a moment to reflect on your life, be reformed, and appreciate the people who care about us

The phrase 'be appreciated with' is incorrect. The verb 'appreciate' should be active and not followed by 'with'. Also, 'be reformed' is awkward; 'become better' or 'improve' might be better, but as per instruction, only grammar issues are corrected.

× Yes, I do they not choose about cake and presents

✓ Yes, I do; they do not choose about cake and presents

The sentence is unclear and seems to misuse pronouns. Adding a semicolon and clarifying 'they do not choose' improves clarity and grammar.

× And sometimes it is a skill to treat yourself

✓ And sometimes it is a skill to treat yourself

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× I think the most important birthday to celebrate in Vietnam is probably the first trial birthday

✓ I think the most important birthday to celebrate in Vietnam is probably the first birthday

The phrase 'first trial birthday' is unclear and likely incorrect. 'First birthday' is the correct singular form for this context.

× It's a traditional ceremony where where family members gather to wait for the child health and future

✓ It's a traditional ceremony where family members gather to wish for the child's health and future

The phrase 'gather to wait for the child health' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'gather to wish for the child's health'. Also, 'child health' should be possessive 'child's health'.

× unlike to the traditional milestones

✓ unlike the traditional milestones

The preposition 'to' is unnecessary after 'unlike'. The correct phrase is 'unlike the traditional milestones'.