Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中有较多的语法错误和重复的填充词，句子结构不完整，表达不够连贯。建议简化句子结构，避免重复使用“uh”，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: On my birthday, my family usually gathers for a dinner. Sometimes, I invite my friends and classmates to join us. Occasionally, we travel to another city to celebrate together.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，句子不够简洁。建议注意时态一致，避免重复词汇，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: When I was a child, I usually had dinner with my family on my birthday. Sometimes, I invited my friends, and we went to watch films or sing songs at KTV.

提案: 回答表达了观点，但存在重复和语法错误。建议减少重复，使用更准确的表达，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, definitely. Birthdays are important because they bring my family together for dinner and meaningful interactions. Moreover, birthdays motivate me to set new goals and improve myself in the coming year.

提案: 回答中语法和表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，明确表达观点，并使用连接词增强逻辑性。

例: I think grandparents' birthdays are the most important to celebrate in China. On these occasions, family members, especially the younger generation, express their love and gratitude to the elders.

× all of my, uh, family members get together and eating dinner

✓ all of my family members get together and eat dinner

这里动词get和eat是并列关系，应该用动词原形eat，而不是动名词eating。

× sometimes we, I will, I invited my classmates and my friends

✓ sometimes we, I will invite my classmates and my friends

这里描述的是习惯动作，应该用一般现在时或将来时，不能用过去时invited。

× and also we will, we went to the other city to have a.

✓ and also we will go to another city to have a celebration.

will后面应该接动词原形go，而不是过去式went。

× When I was a kid I usually in my birthday have a dinner with my all of my family members

✓ When I was a kid I usually had dinner with all of my family members on my birthday

描述过去习惯动作，应该用过去时had，且介词短语位置调整更自然。

× sometimes I will invited my friends

✓ sometimes I would invite my friends

描述过去习惯动作，will不合适，应该用would，且invite用原形。

× We we went to watching films and going to KTV to sing songs.

✓ We went to watch films and went to KTV to sing songs.

动词went后面接动词原形watch，而不是动名词watching。

× everyone, every family members get together

✓ everyone, every family member gets together

everyone和every后面应接单数名词family member，且动词用第三人称单数gets。

× For me it's a brand new and it encouraged me

✓ For me it's brand new and it encourages me

描述现在感受，应该用一般现在时encourages。

× I will I will doing better and achieve my goals.

✓ I will do better and achieve my goals.

will后面应接动词原形do，而不是doing。

× their oldest family members in their birthdays

✓ their oldest family members on their birthdays

这里应使用复数family members，且介词用on表示具体日期。

× their oldest family members in their birthdays

✓ their oldest family members on their birthdays

表示在某一天，应该用介词on，而不是in。

× the young people and all the family members can celebrate their birthday

✓ the young people and all the family members can celebrate their birthdays

birthday应与复数主语对应，使用复数birthdays。