Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains some grammatical errors, such as "do my follow my daily routine" and unclear phrases like "on education like birthday." To improve, try to be more concise and clear, avoid redundancy, and use correct grammar. Also, provide specific details to enrich your answer and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Usually, I prefer to spend my birthday quietly by following my daily routine. However, sometimes I like to visit the temple to pray and reflect on the past year.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by avoiding redundant phrases like "I remember back in the day" and by using more precise vocabulary. Also, try to use linking words to make your answer more coherent and add more specific details.

例: When I was young, I usually celebrated my birthday with my friends. For example, I would bring sweets and chocolates to school to share with my classmates, which made the day very special.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and incomplete sentences, such as "a very good 4 social gathering and." To improve, ensure your sentences are complete and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific reasons why celebrating your birthday is important.

例: Yes, celebrating my birthday is important to me because it allows me to gather with my friends and family. This social gathering helps strengthen our relationships and creates happy memories.

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be improved by avoiding informal phrases like "So yeah" and by providing more specific reasons or examples. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent and avoid repetition.

例: In China, I believe that celebrating children's birthdays is more important because they are usually more excited about these occasions. Additionally, such celebrations help nurture their social skills and create joyful experiences.

× I usually do my follow my daily routine on my birthday as well.

✓ I usually follow my daily routine on my birthday as well.

The phrase 'do my follow' is incorrect because 'follow' is a verb and does not need 'do' before it. The correct structure is simply 'I usually follow my daily routine.' This corrects the singular/plural and verb usage.

× But sometime I like to go to the temple on education like birthday.

✓ But sometimes I like to go to the temple on special occasions like my birthday.

The word 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. Also, 'education like birthday' is unclear and incorrect; it should be 'special occasions like my birthday' to make sense in context.

× When I was young, I remember back in the day, I used to celebrate my birthday with my friends, and when I used to go to my school, I like to distribute sweets or chocolates among my friends.

✓ When I was young, I remember back in the day, I used to celebrate my birthday with my friends, and when I went to school, I liked to distribute sweets or chocolates among my friends.

The phrase 'when I used to go to my school' is awkward; 'when I went to school' is correct past tense. Also, 'I like to distribute' should be 'I liked to distribute' to maintain past tense consistency.

× because it is a occasion where I invite my friends and family members and we get together to celebrate my birthday, which is a very good 4 social gathering and.

✓ because it is an occasion where I invite my friends and family members and we get together to celebrate my birthday, which is a very good social gathering.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a word starting with a vowel sound like 'occasion'. Also, '4' is incorrect and should be removed. The sentence was incomplete and has been corrected for clarity.

× Well, in China, I think celebrating the birthdays of children is more important than celebrating the birthdays of the elderly, because children are usually more excited about the occasions like birthday than the older people.

✓ Well, in China, I think celebrating the birthdays of children is more important than celebrating the birthdays of the elderly, because children are usually more excited about occasions like birthdays than older people.

The phrase 'the occasions like birthday' should be 'occasions like birthdays' to correctly use plural forms. Also, 'the older people' is better as 'older people' without 'the' in this context.