Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and grammatically correct. Avoid redundancy and use correct verb tenses. For example, say "I usually buy a cake and invite some friends to celebrate with me." Also, try to add a linking word to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I usually treat my birthday like a normal day, but I always buy a cake and invite some friends to celebrate with me.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding hesitation and repetition. Use linking words like "and" or "also" to connect ideas. For example, "My parents always bought a cake and invited relatives and friends to celebrate. They also gave me gifts, which I loved."

例: When I was young, my parents always bought a cake and invited relatives and friends to celebrate my birthday. They also gave me gifts, which made me very happy.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but contains hesitations and grammatical errors. Try to speak more fluently and use correct verb forms. Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, "Yes, definitely. I think birthdays are important because they remind us of when we were born and help us mark important moments in our lives."

例: Yes, definitely. I think birthdays are important because they remind us of when we were born and help us mark important moments in our lives.

提案: Your answer expresses your feelings well but has some grammatical mistakes and could be more concise. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "I think my parents' birthdays are the most important because I love them the most, so I always celebrate their birthdays."

例: I think my parents' birthdays are the most important because I love them the most, so I always celebrate their birthdays.

× So I usually buy a cake for my birthday and invited some of my friends to celebrate with me.

✓ So I usually buy a cake for my birthday and invite some of my friends to celebrate with me.

The verb 'invited' is in the past tense, but the sentence is describing a habitual action in the present, so the verb should be in the base form 'invite' to match the present tense context.

× My parents valued my birthday, so they always bought a cake for me and invited some relatives or friends, I mean my friends, to celebrate with me.

✓ My parents valued my birthday, so they always bought a cake for me and invited some relatives or friends, I mean my friends, to celebrate with me.

This sentence is correct in past tense as it describes past events, so no correction is needed.

× They also gave me birthday gifts.

✓ They also gave me birthday gifts.

This sentence correctly uses past tense to describe past events, so no correction is needed.

× I think the birthday is a very important date for a person because it reminds you to think about uh, when you was born in this world and uh, uh, it helps you to, to mark your life.

✓ I think the birthday is a very important date for a person because it reminds you to think about uh, when you were born in this world and uh, uh, it helps you to, to mark your life.

The pronoun 'you' requires the verb 'were' in past tense, not 'was'. 'You' always pairs with 'were' in past tense regardless of singular or plural.

× I think no one's birthday would be more important than my parents birthdays because they are the persons I love most so I think nothing important than their birthday.

✓ I think no one's birthday would be more important than my parents' birthdays because they are the people I love most so I think nothing is more important than their birthdays.

The word 'parents' is plural and needs an apostrophe to show possession: 'parents''. Also, 'persons' is less common and 'people' is preferred. The phrase 'nothing important than' is incorrect; it should be 'nothing is more important than'. Additionally, 'birthday' should be plural 'birthdays' to match 'parents'.