Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答自然且内容丰富，但可以使用更多连接词使句子更连贯，例如使用“then”或“after that”来连接活动顺序。此外，避免使用“funny”来形容生日时光，因为它可能引起误解，建议用“joyful”或“enjoyable”。

例: I usually go to a restaurant for a big meal with my close friends. After that, they give me gifts, and we take photos while singing birthday songs and eating cake. It is an enjoyable and memorable time for all of us.

提案: 回答结构清晰，但可以使用更多连接词如“then”或“after that”来增强连贯性。同时，注意时态一致性，建议将“would like to go”改为“would go”。

例: When I was a kid, I usually spent my birthdays with my parents. We would go to the amusement park, which was very exciting and memorable. Then, in the evening, we would have a small party at home with cakes and gifts.

提案: 回答简洁且表达清晰，可以通过添加连接词如“because”或“so”来增强逻辑性。此外，可以加入具体的活动例子，使内容更具体。

例: I think it is very important for me to celebrate birthdays because it is such a special day. On that day, I get to do activities I love, such as meeting friends or enjoying my favorite food, so it gives me a chance to take a break from my daily routine.

提案: 回答内容丰富，但句子中有语法错误，如“shows”应为“show”。建议使用连接词如“for example”来引出例子，并注意句子结构的准确性。

例: In China, people consider the whole number birthdays of elders as the most important to celebrate. For example, their 18th or 70th birthdays are special occasions. Families usually gather to host celebrations, prepare special meals, and show their respect and love.

× Families usually gather to host celebrations, prepare special meals and shows their respect and love.

✓ Families usually gather to host celebrations, prepare special meals and show their respect and love.

The verb 'shows' is incorrect here because it does not agree with the plural subject 'Families'. The correct form is 'show' to match the plural subject. This is a subject-verb agreement issue, which falls under the category of incorrect use of verbs with plural subjects.