Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，句子结构不够清晰，建议简化句子，避免重复，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: On my birthday, I usually invite my friends to my home for a party. My parents prepare a delicious dinner, and we make a cake together. We all enjoy the celebration and have a great time.

提案: 回答中有重复词汇，语法不够准确，建议使用更准确的时态和词汇，避免重复，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: When I was young, my parents often prepared a big cake and organized a party. They invited my good friends, and we all enjoyed a happy time together.

提案: 表达不够自然，语法错误较多，建议使用更准确的表达方式，避免重复，并用连接词连接观点和理由。

例: Definitely, I think birthdays are important because they remind me that I am growing up and becoming more mature. Therefore, celebrating birthdays is crucial for everyone.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和用词不当，建议注意时态和词汇的正确使用，避免重复，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I think a mother's birthday is very important in Chinese culture. On that day, we usually buy flowers or a cake and spend quality time with our mother.

× Well during my birthday I always invite my friends to our to my home and have a birthday party together and my parents will also prepare a dinner, delicious dinner with others and then we will make a cake together and have a good time.

✓ Well, during my birthday I always invite my friends to my home and have a birthday party together, and my parents also prepare a delicious dinner for us. Then we make a cake together and have a good time.

句中“invite my friends to our to my home”中“to our to my home”使用不当，应改为“to my home”。“prepare a dinner, delicious dinner with others”表达不清，应改为“prepare a delicious dinner for us”。此外，句子较长，适当断句更清晰。

× Well, I think in my childhood my parents also often prepare a good a big cake and have a good good party together. And they also will invite my good friend together and enjoy a happy time.

✓ Well, I think in my childhood my parents often prepared a big cake and had a good party together. They also invited my good friends and enjoyed a happy time.

描述过去的事情，动词应使用过去时态，如“prepare”应改为“prepared”，“have”改为“had”，“will invite”改为“invited”。

× Definitely, yes. I think birthday is a goal that reminds me I am grow up and I can more mature, mature in the in the future. So I think birthday is very crucial for everyone.

✓ Definitely, yes. I think a birthday is a milestone that reminds me I am growing up and can become more mature in the future. So I think birthdays are very important for everyone.

“birthday is a goal”表达不准确，改为“a milestone”更合适。“I am grow up”应为进行时“I am growing up”。“I can more mature”缺少动词，应为“can become more mature”。“birthday is very crucial”应改为复数“birthdays are very important”。

× I think mother's birthday is is significant birthday in Chinese mind. So in mother's birthday we will also bought a flower or a cake and enjoy a good time with our mommy.

✓ I think mother's birthday is a significant birthday in Chinese culture. So on mother's birthday we also buy flowers or a cake and enjoy a good time with our mom.

“we will also bought”时态错误，过去式“bought”与“will”不搭配，应改为一般现在时“buy”。“in Chinese mind”表达不自然，改为“in Chinese culture”。“mommy”口语化，正式表达用“mom”。