Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it is a bit repetitive and slightly long. Try to avoid repeating phrases like 'celebrate my birthday' and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, keep your answer concise within 4-5 sentences.

例: On my birthday, I usually spend quality time with my family. We have a small get-together at home where we enjoy snacks and cut a cake together. It's a simple yet joyful celebration that I look forward to every year.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'distribute some tables to the my to my classmates'. Please focus on clarity and correct grammar. Also, use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about your childhood birthday celebrations.

例: When I was young, I used to give small gifts to my classmates at school. Afterwards, my parents would organize a small party at home with my friends, which was always a lot of fun.

提案: Your answer conveys your opinion well but contains some grammatical mistakes and redundancy, such as 'spend celebrate our birthday'. Try to use linking words and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, be careful with sentence structure to make your answer more natural.

例: Yes, I believe celebrating birthdays is important because it allows us to cherish special moments with family and friends. Since it's a unique day for each person, it's worth celebrating to create lasting memories.

提案: Your answer is relevant but somewhat repetitive and lacks coherence. Avoid repeating phrases like 'celebrate their birthday'. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific cultural details to enrich your answer.

例: In Chinese culture, people usually consider the birthdays of their parents and children as the most important to celebrate. Additionally, they sometimes celebrate friends' birthdays, but family occasions hold greater significance.

× I used to distribute some tables to the my to my classmates in my school and then having a small party with my friends at my home, which was us usually organized by my parents.

✓ I used to distribute some tables to my classmates in my school and then have a small party with my friends at my home, which was usually organized by my parents.

The phrase 'then having' is incorrect here because after 'used to distribute', the verb should be in base form 'have' to maintain parallel structure. Using 'having' (verb + -ing) is incorrect in this context. Also, 'the my to my' is a typographical error and should be corrected to 'my'.

× I used to distribute some tables to the my to my classmates in my school and then having a small party with my friends at my home, which was us usually organized by my parents.

✓ I used to distribute some tables to my classmates in my school and then have a small party with my friends at my home, which was usually organized by my parents.

The phrase 'the my to my' is incorrect and redundant. It should be corrected to 'my' to properly indicate possession. Also, 'us usually organized' is incorrect; 'us' should be removed to correct the sentence.

× I used to distribute some tables to the my to my classmates in my school and then having a small party with my friends at my home, which was us usually organized by my parents.

✓ I used to distribute some tables to my classmates in my school and then have a small party with my friends at my home, which was usually organized by my parents.

The use of 'some tables' is likely incorrect as 'tables' does not fit the context. Possibly, the intended word was 'treats' or 'sweets'. However, since the instruction is to correct only grammar mistakes from the list, this is noted but not corrected here.

× which was us usually organized by my parents.

✓ which was usually organized by my parents.

The pronoun 'us' is incorrectly used here. The correct form is to omit 'us' because the passive voice 'was organized' does not require an object pronoun.

× celebrating birthday is quite important because it helps to cherish some moments with your family and friends on that day.

✓ celebrating a birthday is quite important because it helps to cherish some moments with your family and friends on that day.

The noun 'birthday' is countable and requires an article. 'A birthday' is correct here instead of 'birthday' without an article.

× It's a special day for a person and we should obviously spend celebrate our birthday.

✓ It's a special day for a person and we should obviously celebrate our birthday.

The phrase 'spend celebrate' is incorrect. The verb 'spend' should be followed by a gerund (e.g., 'spend celebrating') or omitted. Here, 'spend' is unnecessary and should be removed to correct the sentence.