Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答内容丰富且自然，但句子较长，建议适当拆分句子，使表达更清晰流畅。同时，可以使用更多连接词来增强句子之间的逻辑关系。

例: I usually have a big meal with my family on my birthday. However, if I have to stay at school, I like to go shopping with my roommates. This makes me feel happy and relaxed.

提案: 回答中信息较多，建议分成两到三句表达，避免句子过长。同时，可以增加一些具体细节，使内容更生动。

例: When I was a child, my parents often bought a big cake for me. We also traveled during summer vacation to celebrate my birthday. These trips created great memories for me.

提案: 回答表达清晰且有逻辑，但可以使用更多连接词来增强句子间的连贯性，同时丰富词汇表达。

例: I used to think celebrating my birthday was important. However, now I don't, because I have a busy schedule and prefer spending time alone. Therefore, I like to do things I enjoy rather than celebrating with others.

提案: 回答内容完整，但句子结构较复杂，建议拆分句子并使用更多连接词，使表达更自然流畅。

例: In China, people usually celebrate the birthdays of close family members, such as grandparents, parents, or children. These occasions bring the whole family together and strengthen family bonds.

× Normally I have a big meal with my family on my birthday, but when I have to stay at the school, I like to go shopping with my roommates to celebrate my birthday, which makes me feel happy and relaxed.

✓ Normally I have a big meal with my family on my birthday, but when I have to stay at school, I like to go shopping with my roommates to celebrate my birthday, which makes me feel happy and relaxed.

介词短语中，通常不需要使用定冠词“the”在“school”前，除非特指某一所学校。这里表达的是一般情况，应该去掉“the”。

× Well, when I was a child, my parents often bought a big cake for me, and in order to celebrate my birthday, we often traveled on summer vacation because my birthday was in the summer, which created great memories for me.

✓ Well, when I was a child, my parents often bought a big cake for me, and in order to celebrate my birthday, we often traveled during summer vacation because my birthday was in the summer, which created great memories for me.

介词搭配错误，应该用“during summer vacation”表示“在暑假期间”，而不是“on summer vacation”。

× So on my birthday I want to do some things that I enjoy instead of celebrating with others.

✓ So on my birthday I want to do some things that I enjoy instead of celebrating with others.

该句时态和语法正确，无需修改。

× If you see some people celebrate birthday in China, chances are people usually celebrate the birthdays of close family members like grandparents, parents or children because these occasions bring the whole family together and strengthen family bonds.

✓ If you see some people celebrate birthdays in China, chances are people usually celebrate the birthdays of close family members like grandparents, parents or children because these occasions bring the whole family together and strengthen family bonds.

“celebrate birthday”应为复数形式“celebrate birthdays”，因为这里指的是多个生日的庆祝。