Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more structured and clear. Start with a direct response, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like 'E in the evening'.

例: On my birthday, I usually prefer to relax at home because I have been working for many years and have family responsibilities. Therefore, I spend the day resting and in the evening, I enjoy some delicious food with my family.

提案: Focus on clear sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, be specific about your activities and feelings.

例: When I was young, I was very excited about my birthday. I used to invite all my friends and family to celebrate. I enjoyed dressing up in beautiful clothes and wearing birthday accessories. We always had a big cake and lots of fun.

提案: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence flow by using linking words. Be more specific about why birthdays are important to you.

例: Yes, I think celebrating birthdays is important because in our busy lives, we rarely find time to gather. Birthdays provide an opportunity to meet loved ones and enjoy quality time together.

提案: It's good to be honest when you don't know something, but try to answer the question by giving a general opinion or related information to show your speaking ability.

例: I am not very familiar with important birthdays in China. However, I think people usually celebrate the birthdays of national leaders or cultural figures who have made significant contributions to the country.

× I usually like to take rest on my birthday since I'm working from so many years and I have a responsibility of my family as well.

✓ I usually like to take rest on my birthday since I have been working for many years and I have a responsibility towards my family as well.

The phrase 'I'm working from so many years' is incorrect because the present continuous tense is not used for actions that started in the past and continue to the present. The correct tense is present perfect continuous ('have been working'). Also, 'from so many years' should be 'for many years' as 'for' is the correct preposition to indicate duration.

× I usually like to take rest on my birthday since I'm working from so many years and I have a responsibility of my family as well.

✓ I usually like to take rest on my birthday since I have been working for many years and I have a responsibility towards my family as well.

The phrase 'responsibility of my family' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'responsibility towards my family' to indicate duty or care for someone.

× So on my birthday I just want to chill at home and E in the evening just want to have some good food and total rest.

✓ So on my birthday, I just want to chill at home and in the evening, I just want to have some good food and complete rest.

The sentence has a fragment 'and E in the evening' which seems to be a typo or incomplete. It is corrected to 'and in the evening' to make the sentence complete and clear. Also, 'total rest' is better expressed as 'complete rest'.

× Since like every child, I was very crazy about my birthday, I was definitely want to call my all my friends near and dear ones on my birthday.

✓ Like every child, I was very crazy about my birthday; I definitely wanted to call all my friends and near and dear ones on my birthday.

The phrase 'I was definitely want' is incorrect because 'was' (past tense of 'be') should not be followed by the base verb 'want'. The correct past tense form is 'wanted'. Also, 'my all my friends' is redundant; 'all my friends' is correct.

× I was definitely want to call my all my friends near and dear ones on my birthday.

✓ I definitely wanted to call all my friends and near and dear ones on my birthday.

The phrase 'my all my friends' is incorrect; 'all my friends' is the correct pronoun order. Also, 'near and dear ones' should be connected with 'and' to indicate both groups.

× I want I Washington wanted to dress up with beautiful clothes and lots of birthday accessories and I wanted to cut a big cake and wanted to have so many.

✓ I wanted to dress up in beautiful clothes and lots of birthday accessories, and I wanted to cut a big cake and have many treats.

The phrase 'I want I Washington wanted' is incorrect and seems to be a transcription error; corrected to 'I wanted'. Also, 'dress up with' should be 'dress up in' for clothes. The phrase 'wanted to have so many' is incomplete; specifying 'many treats' or similar completes the thought.

× I really like to celebrate my birthday because we should have so many small small events to get celebrate because in current life style we don't get time to celebrate things.

✓ I really like to celebrate my birthday because we should have many small events to celebrate since in the current lifestyle we don't get time to celebrate things.

The phrase 'so many small small events to get celebrate' is incorrect; 'many small events to celebrate' is correct. Also, 'get celebrate' is incorrect; the verb 'celebrate' should be used directly. 'Current life style' should be 'current lifestyle' as one word.

× Birthdays as one of things where we celebrate, we meet each other, we spend good time.

✓ Birthdays are one of the things where we celebrate, meet each other, and spend good time.

The sentence lacks the verb 'are' after 'Birthdays' which is necessary. Also, 'one of things' should be 'one of the things' with the definite article 'the'.

× I'm an Indian and I have no idea about China and who is the most important person in China whose birthday celebration is so important?

✓ I'm an Indian and I have no idea about China or who the most important person in China is whose birthday celebration is so important.

The sentence structure is awkward; 'and who is' should be connected with 'or who the most important person in China is' to form a proper indirect question. Also, the question mark is not needed as this is a statement.