Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn nên tự nhiên hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên nói rõ hơn về hoạt động bạn làm, sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và mở rộng thêm chi tiết cụ thể.

例: On my birthday, I usually relax with my friends and we have a meal together at a nice restaurant. We enjoy chatting and celebrating the day in a cozy atmosphere.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ cho chính xác hơn. Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng, sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể về cách bạn tổ chức sinh nhật khi còn nhỏ.

例: When I was young, I spent my birthday with my family and friends. We always enjoyed a nice meal together and celebrated with games and music.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn chưa rõ ràng và logic. Bạn nên giải thích rõ lý do tại sao việc tổ chức sinh nhật quan trọng với bạn, tránh những câu không liên quan hoặc gây hiểu nhầm.

例: Yes, I think it is important to celebrate my birthday because it is a special day to appreciate life and spend time with loved ones, even if I don't have much money.

提案: Bạn nên cố gắng trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và tránh nói những câu không rõ nghĩa. Hãy đưa ra ý kiến cá nhân và giải thích lý do một cách rõ ràng, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc.

例: I think the most important birthdays to celebrate in China are those of close family members, like parents and grandparents, because family is very important in Chinese culture.

× On my birthday I usually chill out with my friend and we have meal together.

✓ On my birthday I usually chill out with my friends and we have a meal together.

The noun 'friend' should be plural 'friends' because it implies more than one person. Also, 'meal' needs the article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct.

× On my birthday when I was young, I spent time for my family and my friends.

✓ On my birthday when I was young, I spent time with my family and my friends.

The correct preposition to use with 'spend time' is 'with', not 'for'. 'Spend time with' means to be together with someone.

× We have a enjoy a nice meal together and celebrate.

✓ We enjoyed a nice meal together and celebrated.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with 'enjoy' incorrectly. The past tense 'enjoyed' and 'celebrated' should be used to match the past time frame.

× Yes, I think so because I don't have much money so I can celebrate my birthday.

✓ Yes, I think so because I don't have much money, so I can't celebrate my birthday.

The modal verb 'can' is incorrectly used here. The meaning suggests inability due to lack of money, so 'can't' is appropriate.

× I have no idea about that, but I think everyone in the world. Would be would have celebrated.

✓ I have no idea about that, but I think everyone in the world would celebrate it.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains redundant modal verbs 'would be would have'. The corrected sentence is a complete thought with proper modal verb usage.