Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有些语法错误和用词不当，比如“Where on my birthday”应改为“On my birthday”，动词时态应保持一致。此外，回答稍显冗长，可以更简洁自然。建议使用简单句并注意时态一致。

例: On my birthday, I usually throw a big party and invite my friends to celebrate. Sometimes, we go to karaoke to sing together. It's always a memorable time.

提案: 回答中缺少主语，时态和冠词使用不准确，如“when was a child”应为“When I was a child”，“a delicious food”应为“delicious food”。建议注意句子结构和冠词的正确使用，使表达更自然。

例: When I was a child, my parents usually invited my grandparents to my birthday. My mom always cooked delicious food for me, and my dad bought a cute cake to celebrate.

提案: 回答表达了观点，但部分用词不准确，如“reserve the blessings”应为“receive blessings”，且有重复词“a a”。建议注意词汇的准确性和避免重复，使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I think it's very important because it only happens once a year and is very meaningful. You can receive blessings and gifts from friends and family. It's always a memorable day.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，如“she hardly ever celebrate”应为“she hardly ever celebrates”，“she always she had always loved me”重复且时态混乱，且最后用词“him”应为“her”。建议理清句子结构，注意主谓一致和代词使用。

例: Well, I think my grandma's birthday is the most important to celebrate in China because she hardly ever celebrates it. She has always loved me very much, so I want to show my love to her.

× Where on my birthday I usually throw a big party and invited my friends to celebrate my birthday and sometimes we even go to the karaoke to sing together.

✓ On my birthday, I usually throw a big party and invite my friends to celebrate with me, and sometimes we even go to karaoke to sing together.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and tense inconsistency. 'Where on my birthday' is incorrect; it should be 'On my birthday'. Also, 'invited' should be 'invite' to match the present tense 'usually throw'. The phrase 'go to the karaoke' should be 'go to karaoke' as 'karaoke' is uncountable here. The sentence structure is improved for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Where on my birthday I usually throw a big party and invited my friends to celebrate my birthday and sometimes we even go to the karaoke to sing together.

✓ On my birthday, I usually throw a big party and invite my friends to celebrate with me, and sometimes we even go to karaoke to sing together.

The verb 'invited' is in the past tense, but the sentence describes a habitual action, so the present tense 'invite' should be used to maintain consistency.

× When was a child, my parents usually invited my grandparents to join my birthday and my mom always cooked a delicious food just for me and my dad always bought a cute cake for me to celebrate birthday.

✓ When I was a child, my parents usually invited my grandparents to join my birthday, and my mom always cooked delicious food just for me, and my dad always bought a cute cake for me to celebrate my birthday.

The phrase 'When was a child' is missing the subject 'I'. 'A delicious food' is incorrect because 'food' is uncountable and does not need an article. Also, 'celebrate birthday' should be 'celebrate my birthday' for clarity.

× When was a child, my parents usually invited my grandparents to join my birthday and my mom always cooked a delicious food just for me and my dad always bought a cute cake for me to celebrate birthday.

✓ When I was a child, my parents usually invited my grandparents to join my birthday, and my mom always cooked delicious food just for me, and my dad always bought a cute cake for me to celebrate my birthday.

The article 'a' before 'delicious food' is incorrect because 'food' is an uncountable noun and should not have an indefinite article.

× Well, I think my grandma's birthday is the most important to celebrate in China only because she hardly ever celebrate on her birthdays and she always she had always loved me very much. So I want to show my love to him.

✓ Well, I think my grandma's birthday is the most important to celebrate in China because she hardly ever celebrates her birthdays and she has always loved me very much. So I want to show my love to her.

The pronoun 'him' is incorrect when referring to 'grandma'; it should be 'her'. Also, 'celebrate' should be 'celebrates' to agree with the third person singular subject 'she'. The phrase 'she always she had always loved me' is redundant and corrected to 'she has always loved me' for clarity and tense consistency.

× Well, I think my grandma's birthday is the most important to celebrate in China only because she hardly ever celebrate on her birthdays and she always she had always loved me very much.

✓ Well, I think my grandma's birthday is the most important to celebrate in China because she hardly ever celebrates her birthdays and she has always loved me very much.

The verb 'celebrate' should be 'celebrates' to agree with the third person singular subject 'she'. Also, the phrase 'she always she had always loved me' is incorrect and redundant; it is corrected to 'she has always loved me' to maintain proper tense and clarity.