Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Apni answer e kichu grammar error ache, ar kichu sentence structure improve kora dorkar. Apnar answer e 'doing very thing' er bodole 'do everything' bola uchit. Apni sentence gulo ke aro natural korte paren, ar kichu linking words use korte paren jate answer ta fluent hoy.

例: I usually feel very excited on my birthday because it is a special day for me. So, I like to do everything I enjoy. Mostly, I go outside to spend time with my friends or family.

提案: Apnar answer e kichu grammar ar word choice error ache. 'Did anything which I want to prefer' er bodole 'did whatever I liked' bola bhalo. Apni sentence gulo ke aro clear ar structured korte paren, ar linking words use korte paren.

例: When I was young, I did whatever I liked on my birthday. For example, I went outside with my friends and parents. Sometimes, my relatives also came to my house to celebrate with me.

提案: Apnar answer e kichu redundancy ache, ar sentence structure aro improve kora dorkar. Apni 'sometimes' er poriborte 'I think' use korte paren jate answer ta confident lage. Apni linking words use kore aro bhalo explanation dite paren.

例: I think it is really important to celebrate birthdays because it is a special day that comes only once a year. Celebrating helps us feel happy and appreciate our life.

提案: Apnar answer e kichu grammar ar clarity problem ache. 'Celebrate in China in very gently' er bodole 'celebrate gently' or 'celebrate in a special way' bola bhalo. Apni sentence gulo ke aro clear ar logical korte paren.

例: I think my child's birthday is the most important to celebrate in China because he is only two years old. It is important to celebrate it in a special way so he can be happy and enjoy his early years.

× Actually I feel so excited and so enjoyment on my birthday because it's a special day for me.

✓ Actually I feel so excited and so joyful on my birthday because it's a special day for me.

The word 'enjoyment' is a noun, but here an adjective or adverb is needed to describe the feeling. 'Joyful' is an adjective that correctly describes the feeling. Using 'enjoyment' in this context is incorrect.

× So I usually doing very thing which I want to do it.

✓ So I usually do everything that I want to do.

The verb 'doing' is incorrectly used after 'usually'. The correct form is the base verb 'do' after 'usually'. Also, 'very thing' is incorrect; it should be 'everything'. The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary and should be removed.

× Mostly I go outside.

✓ Mostly I go outside.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No correction needed.

× Actually I did anything which I want to prefer when I was young, like I went outside with my friends, my parents and sometimes my relatives also and my relatives came to my house.

✓ Actually I did anything that I wanted to do when I was young, like going outside with my friends, my parents, and sometimes my relatives, who also came to my house.

The word 'anything' is incorrectly used; it should be 'everything' or 'anything that I wanted to do'. Also, 'want to prefer' is incorrect; 'wanted to do' fits better. The sentence structure is improved by changing 'like I went' to 'like going' and clarifying the relatives' visit.

× Actually I did anything which I want to prefer when I was young, like I went outside with my friends, my parents and sometimes my relatives also and my relatives came to my house.

✓ Actually I did anything that I wanted to do when I was young, like I went outside with my friends, my parents, and sometimes my relatives also came to my house.

The verb tense should be consistent in past tense. 'Want' should be 'wanted'. The sentence is long and can be split or connected properly for clarity.

× Sometimes I think it is really important for me or for anyone to celebrate a birthday because it's a very special day for everyone and it comes only one day for us.

✓ Sometimes I think it is really important for me or for anyone to celebrate a birthday because it's a very special day for everyone and it comes only once a year for us.

The phrase 'it comes only one day for us' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'it comes only once a year' to indicate the annual occurrence of birthdays.

× Actually, I think maybe it's my child, he is only two years old and I think it's very important to celebrate in China in very gently and he will be happy to see years and celebrate.

✓ Actually, I think maybe it's my child; he is only two years old, and I think it's very important to celebrate gently in China. He will be happy to grow older and celebrate.

The sentence has pronoun and phrasing issues. 'Celebrate in China in very gently' is incorrect; 'celebrate gently in China' is correct. 'Happy to see years' is unclear; 'happy to grow older' is better. Also, punctuation is improved for clarity.