Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "a visit mall" instead of "visit a mall." Also, try to use linking words to make your answer more coherent, for example, use "after that" or "then" appropriately. Try to avoid redundancy and keep your sentences concise.

例: On my birthday, I usually get up early and visit the gurdwara. After that, I go to watch a movie or visit a mall with my friends. In the evening, I have dinner at a restaurant with my family.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but the last sentence "Now I am not excited" is abrupt and lacks explanation. Try to expand your answer with linking words and reasons to make it more natural and effective. Also, avoid short, disconnected sentences.

例: When I was young, my parents used to throw a big party at home and invite all my friends and relatives. I loved opening gifts and cutting the cake. However, now I am not as excited about birthdays because I prefer spending time quietly with my family.

提案: Your answer is good and relevant, but you can improve it by using linking words and providing more specific reasons or examples. Also, use plural form "birthdays" and articles correctly, for example, "celebrating birthdays" and "an opportunity."

例: I think celebrating birthdays is important because it makes us feel special and valued. Moreover, it gives us an opportunity to meet and spend quality time with our loved ones and relatives.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical mistakes and unclear phrasing, such as "public one of the most important birthdays" and "their Children's day birthday." Also, the question asks about birthdays important in China, but Mahatma Gandhi is an Indian figure, which may confuse the listener. Try to clarify your ideas, use correct grammar, and provide relevant examples.

例: In China, one of the most important birthdays to celebrate is Children's Day, which is dedicated to children and celebrated nationwide. Additionally, some people also observe traditional birthdays of their family members with special gatherings.

× Then I go out and watch a movie or a visit mall with my friends.

✓ Then I go out and watch a movie or visit a mall with my friends.

The verb 'visit' should be in its base form after 'or' when used with another verb 'watch' in the same structure. Using 'a visit mall' is incorrect because 'visit' is a verb and 'mall' is a noun; the article 'a' should come before 'mall' and 'visit' should not have 'a' before it.

× It is national holiday which is celebrated on 22nd October.

✓ It is a national holiday which is celebrated on 22nd October.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'national holiday'. In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article. Hence, 'a national holiday' is correct.