Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Apni answer e beshi filler words (like 'uh') use korchen, ja natural English e kom dekhte hoy. Apnar sentence structure e kichu bhul ache, ar kichu word choice o improve kora dorkar. Apni chesta korun proshner uttor direct dite, ar supporting details clear o specific rakhen. Linking words use korben jate answer ta coherent hoy.

例: On my birthday, I usually arrange a party and invite my friends, family, and relatives. We set up a music stage where my friends and I sing together. This moment is always very special and memorable for me.

提案: Apnar answer e kichu grammar error ache, jemon 'do' er bodole 'did' use kora uchit chilo. Filler words komaben. Apni sentence gulo ke aro clear o structured korte paren, linking words use kore. Supporting details aro specific korben jate answer ta bhalo lage.

例: When I was young, I used to organize big birthday parties and invite my close friends. After the party, we always enjoyed spending time together, which made the day very special.

提案: Apnar answer e grammar o word choice e onek bhul ache, ar filler words beshi. 'More happier' hobe 'happier'. Apni proshner uttor direct o clear korte hobe. Supporting details e specific karon dite paren keno birthday celebrate kora important.

例: Yes, I think celebrating my birthday is important because it makes me feel happy and allows me to spend quality time with my friends and relatives.

提案: Apnar answer e topic theke onek dur chole gechen, ar kichu grammar o vocabulary error ache. Proshner uttor direct dite hobe, ar supporting details specific o relevant rakhen. Linking words use kore answer ke logical banan. Apni proshner main point e focus korun.

例: In China, I think celebrating the birthdays of young family members is most important. Families often give useful gifts to help the young people in their future.

× In my birthday, I usually do lot of things like, uh, I arrange a birthday party and invite at my friend, families and relative.

✓ On my birthday, I usually do a lot of things like, uh, I arrange a birthday party and invite my friends, family, and relatives.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; the correct preposition to use with 'birthday' is 'on'. Also, 'invite at my friend' is incorrect; it should be 'invite my friends'. Additionally, 'families and relative' should be pluralized correctly as 'family and relatives'. 'A lot of' needs the article 'a'.

× In my birthday, I usually do lot of things like, uh, I arrange a birthday party and invite at my friend, families and relative.

✓ On my birthday, I usually do a lot of things like, uh, I arrange a birthday party and invite my friends, family, and relatives.

The phrase 'lot of things' requires the article 'a' to be 'a lot of things'. 'Friend' should be plural 'friends' to match the context. 'Families' should be 'family' as a collective noun, and 'relative' should be plural 'relatives' to match the list.

× I often arrange music stage and uh, uh, my friends and me try to try to singing with together.

✓ I often arrange a music stage and, uh, uh, my friends and I try to sing together.

The pronoun 'me' is incorrect as the subject; it should be 'I'. The phrase 'try to try to singing with together' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'try to sing together'. The preposition 'with' is unnecessary here.

× That moment was really outstanding.

✓ That moment was really outstanding.

This sentence is grammatically correct and needs no correction.

× When I was young, I do a lot of things in my birthday.

✓ When I was young, I did a lot of things on my birthday.

The verb 'do' should be in the past tense 'did' to match the past time frame indicated by 'When I was young'. Also, the preposition 'in' should be 'on' with 'birthday'.

× When I was young, I do a lot of things in my birthday.

✓ When I was young, I did a lot of things on my birthday.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect with 'birthday'; the correct preposition is 'on'.

× Uh, one of the most significant things is that, uh, I arrange a big party for an invited my special friends who are really close to me.

✓ Uh, one of the most significant things was that, uh, I arranged a big party and invited my special friends who were really close to me.

The verbs 'is', 'arrange', and 'invited' need to be in past tense to match the past context. 'Is' changes to 'was', 'arrange' to 'arranged', and 'invited' should be used correctly without 'for an' before it.

× Uh, one of the most significant things is that, uh, I arrange a big party for an invited my special friends who are really close to me.

✓ Uh, one of the most significant things was that, uh, I arranged a big party and invited my special friends who were really close to me.

The phrase 'for an invited my special friends' is incorrect. The preposition 'for' and article 'an' should be removed; 'invited' is a verb here, so it should be 'and invited my special friends'.

× And after that, uh, we enjoyed this moment.

✓ And after that, uh, we enjoyed that moment.

The phrase 'this moment' refers to the present; since the action is in the past, 'that moment' is more appropriate.

× Yes, I think it is important to me celebrate my birthday because, uh, whenever I celebrate my birthday, I feel like uh, more happier and uh, I can easily gossip with my friends, relatives, we together, so why not I, I, I don't happy.

✓ Yes, I think it is important for me to celebrate my birthday because, uh, whenever I celebrate my birthday, I feel happier and, uh, I can easily gossip with my friends and relatives together, so why not? I am happy.

The phrase 'important to me celebrate' should be 'important for me to celebrate' using the correct infinitive form. 'More happier' is incorrect; 'happier' alone suffices. The phrase 'we together' is incorrect; it should be 'together'. The last part is unclear and corrected to 'so why not? I am happy.' for clarity.

× Yes, I think it is important to me celebrate my birthday because, uh, whenever I celebrate my birthday, I feel like uh, more happier and uh, I can easily gossip with my friends, relatives, we together, so why not I, I, I don't happy.

✓ Yes, I think it is important for me to celebrate my birthday because, uh, whenever I celebrate my birthday, I feel happier and, uh, I can easily gossip with my friends and relatives together, so why not? I am happy.

The preposition 'with' is correct before 'my friends and relatives', but 'we together' is incorrect and should be 'together'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Yes, I think it is important to me celebrate my birthday because, uh, whenever I celebrate my birthday, I feel like uh, more happier and uh, I can easily gossip with my friends, relatives, we together, so why not I, I, I don't happy.

✓ Yes, I think it is important for me to celebrate my birthday because, uh, whenever I celebrate my birthday, I feel happier and, uh, I can easily gossip with my friends and relatives together, so why not? I am happy.

The pronoun 'we' is incorrectly used; it should be omitted or replaced with 'together' properly. The phrase 'why not I, I, I don't happy' is ungrammatical and corrected to 'so why not? I am happy.' for clarity.

× As far as I know that Chinese people are more creative and intelligent. They are try to always creative things and I saw number of family when they arrange birthday for young people in their family, they try to give lot of things which is really helpful for them.

✓ As far as I know, Chinese people are more creative and intelligent. They always try to create things, and I saw a number of families who, when they arrange birthdays for young people in their family, try to give a lot of things which are really helpful for them.

The phrase 'They are try to always creative things' is incorrect; it should be 'They always try to create things'. 'I saw number of family' should be 'I saw a number of families'. The relative clause is corrected for clarity. 'Lot of things' needs the article 'a lot of'. 'Which is' should be 'which are' to agree with plural 'things'.