Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“hold hold a intimate guidance”不符合英语习惯，且句子结构混乱。建议简化表达，使用正确的时态和词汇，避免重复，并且注意句子连贯性。

例: Usually, I don't do anything special on my birthday. Instead, I spend a quiet time with my family and friends. We chat and enjoy each other's company, which I really cherish.

提案: 回答中时态使用错误，词汇搭配不当，如“a children”、“meaningful memorable”等。建议注意时态一致，使用正确的名词单复数形式，并且提供更具体的细节。

例: When I was a child, I had the chance to go to a playground on my birthday. Those days were memorable because I could play on many fun rides and enjoy delicious food.

提案: 表达不清晰且有语法错误，如“as this as I get older”、“we don't need to some”。建议简化句子结构，明确表达观点，并使用正确的语法。

例: Honestly, I don't think celebrating my birthday is very important as I get older. To me, a birthday is just a reminder that time is passing.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整的问题，如“transition from transport to adulthood”、“and make”。建议使用完整句子，准确表达观点，并提供更多细节。

例: In China, some birthdays are very important, like the 18th birthday. It symbolizes the transition from childhood to adulthood. Therefore, parents often celebrate this day with their children.

× Nowadays, I don't do some special things on my birthday, instead I often hold hold a intimate guidance from my family and friends.

✓ Nowadays, I don't do any special things on my birthday; instead, I often hold an intimate gathering with my family and friends.

这里'some special things'用法不当，应该用'any special things'表示否定句中的不确定数量。'a intimate guidance'中'intimate'以元音音素开头，冠词应为'an'，且'guidance'用词不当，应该用'gathering'表示聚会。

× This moment is peaceful and gave us a chance to chatting with each other and I'm very cherished this moment.

✓ This moment is peaceful and gives us a chance to chat with each other, and I cherish this moment very much.

'gave'时态错误，应与前半句保持现在时，改为'gives'。'to chatting'中动词不定式后应接动词原形，改为'to chat'。'I'm very cherished'表达错误，应为'I cherish'表示主语主动。

× Back then when I was a children, I have a opportunity to go to a playground when I was birthday.

✓ Back then when I was a child, I had an opportunity to go to a playground on my birthday.

'a children'错误，'children'为复数，单数应为'child'。'have'时态错误，过去时应为'had'。'a opportunity'冠词错误，'opportunity'以元音音素开头，应为'an opportunity'。'when I was birthday'表达错误，应为'on my birthday'。

× These days gave me a meaningful memorable in my life because I can play some more interesting tools during this day and can eat.

✓ Those days gave me meaningful memories in my life because I could play with more interesting toys during that day and eat.

'These days'指现在，应改为'those days'指过去。'a meaningful memorable'搭配错误，应为'meaningful memories'。'can'时态错误，过去时应为'could'。'tools'用词不当，应为'toys'。

× Honestly these days I don't think it's important for me to celebrate my birthday as this as I get older.

✓ Honestly, these days I don't think it's important for me to celebrate my birthday as I get older.

'as this as'结构错误，应删除多余的'this'。

× I think birthday day is just a day that reminder my life is passing and we don't need to some.

✓ I think a birthday is just a day that reminds me my life is passing, and we don't need to do anything special.

'birthday day'重复，改为'a birthday'。'reminder'应为动词形式'reminds'。'we don't need to some'表达不完整，应补充'do anything special'。

× I suppose in China there are some birthday is important, such as 18th birthday.

✓ I suppose in China there are some birthdays that are important, such as the 18th birthday.

'some birthday is'主谓不一致，应为'some birthdays are'。

× This day is a symbol of transition from transport to adulthood.

✓ This day is a symbol of transition from childhood to adulthood.

'transport'用词错误，应为'childhood'。

× Therefore, in China, parents sometimes celebrate this day for their children and make.

✓ Therefore, in China, parents sometimes celebrate this day for their children and make special arrangements.

句子不完整，缺少宾语，补充'make special arrangements'使句子完整。