Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sắp xếp ý hợp lý hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và tránh lặp từ. Ví dụ, bạn có thể nói về các hoạt động cụ thể bạn làm trong ngày sinh nhật và cảm xúc của bạn.

例: On my birthday, I usually invite my friends and relatives to my house. We sing the birthday song together, and they give me some gifts. I enjoy spending time with them and celebrating this special day.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để kết nối các ý và cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể về hoạt động bạn làm trong ngày sinh nhật khi còn nhỏ.

例: When I was in primary school, I usually prepared dinner with my mom on my birthday. After that, I played games with my friends, nephew, and aunt. It was always a fun and memorable day.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự mạch lạc và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trình bày rõ ràng ý kiến của mình và giải thích lý do tại sao bạn nghĩ sinh nhật quan trọng. Sử dụng các câu hoàn chỉnh và từ vựng phù hợp để làm câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: Yes, I do think celebrating birthdays is important. It is a special occasion that reminds us of our birth and life. Celebrating helps us appreciate our growth and spend time with loved ones.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý đến việc sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để kết nối các ý và cung cấp thông tin rõ ràng, mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi trước rồi mới mở rộng sang văn hóa khác nếu cần.

例: Although I am not Chinese, I know that in Vietnam, grandparents' birthdays are very important. We respect our elders and celebrate their long life and wisdom. Families usually gather to honor them and show gratitude.

× In my birthday I usually invite my friends, my relative and also we.

✓ On my birthday, I usually invite my friends, my relatives, and also we sing the birthday song to me and give me some gifts.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to specific days or dates; 'on' should be used instead. Also, 'relative' should be plural 'relatives' to match the context, and the sentence structure was adjusted for clarity.

× my relative and also we.

✓ my relatives, and also we sing the birthday song to me and give me some gifts.

The word 'relative' should be plural 'relatives' because it refers to more than one person. Also, 'gift' should be plural 'gifts' to match the context.

× my relative and also we. Sing birthday song to me and give me some gift.

✓ my relatives, and also we sing the birthday song to me and give me some gifts.

The sentence was fragmented and lacked proper connection. It was corrected to form a complete sentence with proper subject and verb agreement.

× When I was study at primary school.

✓ When I was studying at primary school.

The verb 'study' should be in the present participle form 'studying' after 'was' to form the past continuous tense.

× On my birthday, I usually prepare dinner with my mom and play with my friends or my nephew and aunt.

✓ On my birthday, I usually prepare dinner with my mom and play with my friends, my nephew, and my aunt.

The sentence is mostly correct, but commas were added for clarity in listing people.

× Birthday is celebrated when we are born and is marked alive.

✓ A birthday is celebrated to mark the day we were born and to celebrate being alive.

The phrase 'when we are born' is incorrect in this context; it should refer to the day of birth. Also, 'marked alive' is incorrect; the sentence was rephrased for clarity and correctness.

× I think birthday celebrate is important occasion in our life.

✓ I think celebrating birthdays is an important occasion in our lives.

The phrase 'birthday celebrate' is incorrect; it should be 'celebrating birthdays'. Also, 'important occasion' needs the article 'an', and 'life' should be plural 'lives' to refer to people in general.

× because they're We respect our elders and celebrate their long life and wisdom.

✓ because we respect our elders and celebrate their long life and wisdom.

The pronoun 'they're' (they are) is incorrectly used; it should be 'we' to indicate the subject performing the action.

× Families usually gather together to honor them and show gratitude for their great.

✓ Families usually gather together to honor them and show gratitude for their greatness.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'their great'; it should be 'their greatness' to complete the meaning.